I meant have more votes a day, but both options would be suitable. It's going to take about 30 something days just to get done with the first round, not counting round 2, 3 etc.

It's a long tournament for sure but it actually only lasts for 31 days. 16 for the first round, 8 for the second, 4 for the third, 2 for the fourth and then the final showdown of the top three for the last round.

6 matches every two days for the rest of this round would keep the same pace while giving people more time to vote for each match.

I like that idea. I just hope 12 kharacters won't overload people too much.

oh snap, my bad.

Anyone else have characters they either came up with after they entered, or just didn't get in? I say we all talk about them! In the fan submission page, of course.

Thanks for your opinion Mojo6.

But...

As most of the people on here say, no body want's to read a novel of a bio.

That said, I can show you my expanded bio if you like?! It tells more of the life of the Shoulen race, Life before Kahn's rule, and the "Shoulen's" appearance in 'a' tournament.

If ~Crow~ will allow me, I would like to expand on my entry with the pieces you need to know put back into it.

But I would have to make the ending longer too with his battle with Baraka (the one that killed the Shoulen younglings).


As for the moves. If you read the bio, you'd know that they used their abilities to make shelters, chopping wood or stone, plus digging is involved. They can shape mould to the length of the fighting screen, which is all that is needed as everyone nearly has a "projectile". My character relies on pure ability.

If you want drawings on how my moves would look like than again, please let me know!


It seems you have based your opinion on more of a "glance" rather than a deep look. That's my opinion. But thank you none the less.

Hey mojo can you give Ekimaru a detailed review that would be so cool and be honest don't be afraid to hurt my feelings :D Good or bad I just like people talking about my character

@~Crow~

Can I expand my entry now that I have advanced to the 2nd round?

It seems that my bio/ending needs to explain more to those who wish to know more.

Is this possible?

I take my time with characters as much as Mojo does (he probably takes longer because he's going back to critique them) and I noticed the same things he did. It takes more than skimming to come out with the pointers he did.

You chose not to use a longer bio and you just stand by that choice. Shoulen is written very well but lacks enough depth to make the character and the race sympathetic. They are oppressed, they are builders and they are a simple people; that's all we really know.

The only mention of a tournament you have is that Shoulen 'defeat(ed) everyone in his path for revenge' which alienates him from the MK9 mythos. Kahn is busy holding tournaments and invading Earthrealm. It's hard to see where Shoulen could fit into that story.

The Ground Spike move did stand out because it felt different than the other moves/abilities Shoulen possesses. They make tools with their hands and that makes me envision hammers, pick axes, possibly some sort of lever but not a rope form that travels a great distance.

Try not to be defensive with your character. You can agree and disagree with criticisms given but don't accuse the person taking the time to write a detailed response that they just took one glance and didn't really care.

And in the end, the reviewer isn't perfect either. We might see things the way you see them for your character. You are very close to Shoulen and inherently understand motives, descriptions, backstories different. I know I'm that way with my own creation; I know there are mistakes and things I should've done differently but it's too late now. He'll have to stand on his own when competing.

Ab_Horrence i'd like a review from you on my character kevshi if that's cool with you. and anyone else that can review my character would be greatly appreciated. anyways here's my feedback on all the characters that start with the letter o good and bad.

okorik - i like that he was part of a group of samurai's. fighting style is ok. to much use of teleports. both attires are good. enjoyed victory pose.

oksana - i liked that she would do anything to get onaga back to his throne. interesting fighting style. to much use of teleports. decent entrance. nice ending.

onyx - i like that he is a golem. fighting style is ok. decent attires. landslide special is sweet. to much use of charging. nice entrance.

hope you enjoyed my feedback.

Thanks Ab_Horrence.

You see Shoulen's moves differently to how I see them. You think that his spike moves don't fit well and you think are as thin as rope. This is why I wanted to add to my entry with a bit more detail to his bio and ending. I have written a mid ending too which latches onto the ending. My character don't get directly involved in the tournament, but it tells you why and how the characters moves around it.

I want to add drawings/pictures of Shoulen's moves so everyone can see what they look like.

Also. I have not altered what was already put up. I have just added to it. Extra paragraphs that tell a deeper story. If ~Crow~ don't allow the change then fair enough, I feel that my character could give what you all say is missing. And as I have to wait a while for my second round battle with Krab-man, I want to blow it out the water :P

All depends what ~Crow~'s rules are and what he say's next.

just finished reading all the characters that star with the letter p. here's my feedback good and bad.

peterson - alright fighting style. i liked that he was in the vietnam war. attires are ok. enjoyed the luminous sphere special. love fatality 1. cool match taunt. to much use of guns.

psionic - like the use of mma but needs more detail. special moves are lacking descriptions. to much use of tk. decent victory pose.

psyria - i like that she is a female god. love the alternate attire. to much use of vines. enjoyed the special fog parrry.

hope you enjoyed my feedback.

I would really love you to review De Kai & De Kio, if it's not much trouble :)

So after reading through so many characters (about 60 so far), I have come to the conclusion that many people have no grasp on a proper weight to height ratio....


:(

Updated List:

- Shoulen
- Keilenaten
- Kevshi
- Tyron Magnum
- Casilde
- Komodo
- Krustacean
- Deon Bordeaux
- Lorsid
- Ekimaru

Still taking requests. I should have Keilenaten done tonight and possibly Kevshi.

@ultimatesavage: If you'd like I could re-review Shoulen if Crow allows for your additions. Just to be clear, my suggestions were meant as constructive analysis, nothing more. I recognize that you obviously want Shoulen to do well in this competition so it's in that spirit that I'm trying to point out areas that seem underdeveloped and I can only review what's given as the submission.

@Ab_Horrence: Thanks and well said. I share your point of view on the matter as you explained it quite succinctly.

Thats ok Mojo6.

I just didn't want to totally put off readers with the look of a long bio/ending. But it now seems that the only way to explain further IS to do something longer.

I have also JUST completed some picture edits of some of Shoulen's moves if ~Crow~ allows them to be posted as part of my entry. They'll show you what I meant.

Thanks guys!

I'll take a review on Shiku, my match is only in 3 days but I cant wait any longer lol. If you do it before then, kool, if not kool. Just want a little something to work with, and your reviews for others have been great so far. And dont hold back, I can take a hit or two. Thanks

Add Erzhära then

Well, any review about she will be highly welcome

Remember that time I created a feedback forum and said that I would do critiques for those that asked for them? It was so long ago I barely remembered, however I have finally lived up to my word and done my first one for the main tournament.

@Adder, your review for Merrick can be found here.

I also need to go back and look at everyone who has asked me specifically for reviews. That'll be fun.

Also, I'm adding more to the feedback forum including links to the critiques that others have done. Right now I'm just doing Crow's critiques of eliminated entries. You'll find the links in the first post.

i read through all the characters that start with the letter r. here's my feedback good and bad.

ravyn - i like that she can read and influence peoples emotions. decent fighting style. enjoyed the chain slash special. decent entrance. to much use of the chain. fatality 2 is sick.

revenant - fighting style is a bit bland. attires are alright. i like that your character is a late teenager. enjoyed fatality 1. to much use of needles.

russell - i like that your character has schizophrenia. fighting style is alright. babality is ok. decent match taunt. he shouldn't of apologised to jax and sonya.

hope you enjoyed my feedback.

Looks like Sanguinus was true to his word and there is now a thread for describing the the characters you didn't submit here.

Hey, add De Kai & De Kio to the list. I would really like to see your thoguhts on them!

just finished reading all the characters that start with the letter s. by the way i should be able to finish the rest of the characters tomorrow. so here's my feedback good and bad.

salzar - decent fighting style. interesting attires. match taunt and victory pose are lame. i enjoyed the arrow barrage special.

sapheera - fighting style could use more detail. awsome attires. to much use of sand. the character reminds me of the sirens from the god of war games.

scorch - fighting style could use more detail. to much use of ice. enjoyed the invisibility.

senji - decent fighting style. i like that he worships fujin. not caring for the attires. enjoyed the leg sweep special. neat match taunt.

serenity - i like that she is a goddess of time. fantastic fighting style. i also like using tira. to much use of the ring blade. i enjoyed the ring toss special. fatality 1 is sweet.

shade - fighting style could use more detail. decent attires. enjoyed the chi orb special. to much use of blur.

shika or shiku not sure which one it is - enjoyed fighting style. like the special up chuck's. to much use of staff.

shiloh - interesting fighting style. like that he is a teenager. decent attires. could use more specials. killed kahn a little to easy.

shingai - interesting fighting style. attires are alright. to much use of tant. cool victory pose.

shoulen - decent fighting style. both attires are good. awsome fatality 2. enjoyed the giant chopper special. to much shaping of his arms/hands. need more leg/feet shaping.

snake - i like that he seeks revenge on the black dragon. cool fighting style. nice entrance. decent attires. to much use of sword.

snow - fighting style could use more detail. like the ice knife special. enjoyed fatality 1. to much use of the ice knife.

synder - ok primary attire. love the entrance. decent fighting style. not caring for his specials. ending is alright.

i should be able to finish the rest of the characters tomorrow. hope you enjoyed my feedback.

Funny you should say that she uses too much ring blade, cause i tried to balance it out with her time related powers

i could of added more time related specials but decided against it.

but thanks nevertheless

oh and by the way she isnt a goddess of time shes THE goddess of time