I'd like for the feedback for my KAK

@~Crow~. Could you do me a small favor? On my Shoulen profile, could you swap the pictures over please?! People are messaging me on facebook saying they thought the picture on the left was his primary. It's not lol. The Armored Shoulen is the second (unlockable) attire.

Thanks!

this is to harle. i think the dagger would of actually been better. it would provide short range. the whip would provide long range. having 2 long range weapons seems to negate the characteres efficency in battle. also a character i dispise uses a rapier which is raphiel from sc. he's the one sc character i can't stand and my friend chooses him on purpus.

anyways i finished reading all the characters that start with the letter e and f. so here's my feeedback.

ekibyogami - i liked the idea of an lazy god. it would of been better if he did not help Raiden. cool fighting style. don't care for his primary attire. i like the blood rain special. awesome xray. there's just to much locust.

ekimaru - i liked that your character learned kendo. like the use of 2 swords. to many fire moves. xray is ok. weird babality.

erebus - to many transformations makes your character look overpowered. like the necromancer character idea. neat attires. a tad to many specials. love the match taunt. ending was cheesy.

erzhra - interesting fighting style. don't like the alternate attire. not much use of light. needs more light. good throws.

eterus - has to much orange. like the fighting style. not digging his specials. neat fatality 1.

fear - your bio is to long. like the attires. like the hypnosis special move. xray could of been explained more. don't care for his entrance,match taunt, and victory pose. neat fatal 2.

frigid - like the mystic mist and sliding dagger special moves. neat xray. fatality 1 is ok. fighting style is a bit bland. why was frost the only one in earthrealm.

fu lei - like the character is a shadow priest. don't like his alternate outfit. to many portal moves. like the get up.

so later i'll read more and give more feedback. like to hear feedback on my character kevshi when it gets to my character in the voting period. not hating any characters just giving feedback good and bad.

thanks acidslayer

and yes i know too much text

and i shown picture original form , cyber and make with soul calibur

i've done the same with other mk fan fic characters , fatality's ideas . etc..

but i love everyone ideas and characters look and i can take good and bad critics

but it will be much too long to read because 3 other characters are in the steps of fear , related to him

and took 7 years for the making idea main stuff

You're probably right, there are things about a dagger that are more applicable than a rapier, but she is designed to be a long range character with her close range moves designed mostly around evasion/escaping to a more comfortable range. She does need a weakness, in my opinion, and if that happens to be effectiveness at close range, then so be it. Now that I think about it that way, I think I prefer the rapier, though it is more of a medium length blade as opposed to those 3-4ft super swords from before they learned how to step.....

But Raphael is one of my favorites in SC, hehehe.... We're going to have to remain divided on the subject,

just finished reading all the characters that start with the letter g. here's my feedback. good and bad.

gendo - i like that your character likes to expand in several magics. fighting style could use more detail. i like the evil eye special. fatality 2 is ok. match taunt is kinda dull. would of been nice to have more detail on the outfits because they do sound good.

greyia - i like that your character trys to keep balence. fighting style is a bit boring. interesting primary attire. like the energy ball special. entrance is ok. it would of been better if he failed at balencing the realms.

there's my feedback. not hating any characters. just giving feedback good and bad. got bunch more to read.

Thanks for the feedback acidslayer. I started with him not aligning with Raiden,but it seemed like the typical mk revenge plot,so i had him forced to work with his "recipient" of revenge and iffy on getting the revenge to make it different from the standard,which mk has lots of. But I get the criticism,it may seem weird to have him working with someone who did what Raiden did to him. As for the Locust,i originally was going to use rats etc. as well but i figured from a programming standpoint transforming in multiple ways may be too much,so i limited it to locust. I am still unsure whether that was the right choice,but i had to make one.The primary costume was to exemplify how far he had fallen,and was kind of a reference to his plague theme,his clothes being eaten away at.

It is good to know some of the potential criticisms for my character though,keeps me prepared for my round.

i'm enjoying reading characters and giving feedback. so i just finished reading all the characters that started with the letter h. so here's my feedback good and bad.

hana - i don't really understand your bio but i do like the revenge. decent fighting style. like primary attire. cool specials but could use a few more though. xray is a bit bland. decent match taunt.

howahkanr - like that your character is a drifter. fighting style is ok. primary attire has to much brown. decent alternate attire. like the paralytic dart special. the entrance is a bit campy.

i'll read more and give more feedback. not hating on any characters, just giving feedback good and bad.

sorry to double post so please don't skull me. sorry i miss spelled your character. it's name is howahkan. anyways i just finished reading all the characters that start with the letter i. so here's more feedback good and bad.

ire - i like the fact your character paid a price for tramendous power. fighting style is ok. primary attire has alot more detail than alternate but both are lacking something. i don't know what. like the crossbow special. neat xray. love fatal 1. it would of been better if he stayed insane.

isis - i like that your character comes from egypt. decent fighting style. alternate attire is lacking. fatal 1 is ok. the entrance is a bit campy. like the splitting snake special.

not hating on anyones characters. just giving feedback good and bad. also please don't give me any skull points for double posting. i just got alot more i have to read and critique.

Give me your thoughts on Marek when you get up to the M's.

Can't wait for you to get to my KAK Keilenaten. Love your feedbacks. I will tell you she is coincidentally similar and kind of mixed with Isis. But Keilenaten was created 5 years ago, I'm just saying.... j/k... Can't wait, and again I enjoy your feedback.

People should read the character bio info sections about costumes; it's pretty apparent which is which. But yeah, I'll switch them.

just finished reading the only character that starts with the letter j. so here's my feedback good and bad. k's is going to take some time because of so many characters that start with the letter k.

jared - don't care for his fighting style. alternate attire is ok. to many light moves. i enjoyed fatality 2. the match taunt is a bit dull. it would of been better if he killed Raiden.

not bashing characters. giving feedback good and bad. like i said the k's will take some time because of how many there are but they will get done. i'm sure of it. for my character i will put a question mark next to the name to find out what you guys and girls think of my character kevshi.

Well, Shoulen hard kicking my ass in The Coliseum

Despite two blowouts in the Coliseum, the Council still ended in a draw in two of those matches interestingly enough. I don't really know if that helps or anything, it's rough knowing everyone here but one has to lose eventually, sometimes very painfully so. Just don't want to see anyone else go off the deep end; my detailed reviews for each character will eventually come. My goal is to hopefully give something you guys can use next time to improve your chances of winning, not just with judges but the masses too.

I really hope everyone continues to vote as the contest progresses; I don't feel this contest is as great without the discussion and the popularity it has had.

It was a close one Shinomune.

I think everyone like an underdog. Even more so when the character has to rely on pure ability for kombat. These type of characters are extremely rare in the MK franchise.

I thank everyone that voted for Shoulen. Deeply appreciated!!!

Als everyone keep in mind that even if you areto lose, it doesn't mean you made a bad character. Hell, even a blowout doesn't indicate that. There are so many amazing designs in this tournament that many great designs will get blown out by other, near-perfect designs. So keep your head up. There can only be one winner, but the amount of talent present here is incredible.

On another note, I typically don't ask for feedback on designs of mine unless it's offered, but since Tao Fei is currently in the Colliseum, why not? What do you guys think about Tao Fei? What are things you like, think I could do better, etc?

I'm fine, the last message wasn't me but my ego lol.

I know that eventually I will lose, simply I don't expected to find a great character in the very first round. Me and Oksana are good characters, but like a tennis tournament, both have bad luck to start against a like Ranking Top 8.

And I will continue voting until the end... someone more has to vote with something of criterion. Lol j/k

Generally I can predict a winner very early on in this contest, but this time I don't think there's a clear cut winner. I'm pretty happy about that really, it means the spark of creativity is spreading amongst the community from days gone by.

And yes, it's luck of the draw. Some characters I feel shouldn't have advanced a round (I won't name any names) are and will do so because of the opponents they happened to draw, while others drew very strong opponents in the opening round.

I'll give you some feedback from my perspective IndyRI since you're asking.
Tao Fei
- Overall Presentation 4.5/5: This was your strongest area without a doubt. The entire entry was very well written, edited well, and didn't feel too lengthy or too short. Where others in this competition don't realize that a large part of portraying a memorable character hinges on the quality of the writing, you establish solid competency.

- Appearance 2.5/5: The color scheme is decent (gold and blue) but the overall primary seems a bit bare-bones as a whole. His secondary costume actually sounds like a more interesting design.

- Backstory 2.5/5: Herein lies my biggest issue with this character. I understand that you wanted to develop the "Ultimate Badass of MK" like you mentioned in another thread but in doing so, you've created a two-dimensional character. The tragic loss of his wife and his contempt for the Elder Gods was certainly a stride towards characterization and growth but ultimately, the core concept felt unrelatable and a bit dull. Also, the mastery of the five elements (though while deviating from the typical Earth, Wind, Fire, Water, Spirit approach) is a pretty common theme. I would've liked to have seen some innovation here.

- Gameplay 3.5/5: Another strong point of the entry. While I admittedly didn't like the overall concept of the "Five Elements Mastery" as previously mentioned, you execute that concept well.

So technically speaking, this is a well executed character design and a large part of my critique simply boils down to the like/dislike of the core character concept. This is exactly the kind of entry I think everyone should strive for; technically and grammatically sound, fluid writing, and a cohesive feel in merging concept with gameplay.

I'd be happy to elaborate more if you have specific questions.

Could you do mine please Mojo6! And if you have any questions yourself about my character then please do ask! "Shoulen".

just finished reading all the k's took forevever. so here's my feedback good and bad.

kain - i like that your character trains with many weapons. why choose the dragon. there is a bit of lack of discription on your attires. like the gun blast special. xray is ok. to much use of knifes. like victory pose.

karma - i like that she was created by the death of mk fighters. fighting style is generic. attires are ok but could use more detail. i like the poison ivy throw special. entrance is good. it would of been better if she stayed evil.

karundi - i like that your character comes from the chaosrealm. fighting style is a bit bland. his alternate attire is kind of goofy. xray could of been different. fatality 1 is sweet. love the victory pose. enjoyed the killer backhand special.

kayatsu arashi - like how she freed the creatures from the flesh pits. interesting fighting style. don't care for the alternate attire. enjoyed the saurian slam special. xray is a bit generic. neat match taunt.

keilenaten - i like the idea of a warrior that comes from a forebidden realm. i liked that she killed her parents. bio is a bit longer than i expected. interesting fighting style. to much gold. could use some gemstones to add some color. like the time freeze special. to many teleports. love fatal 2.

kevshi - is my character so i will put a ? to see what you guys and girls think about my character. give honest feedback.

khaali - enjoyed her fighting style. neat attires but have to much detail. bad kitty special is a bit boring. fatality 2 is cool. to much dashing.

khibok - it's interesting your character is an ape. does your character have any relation to moloch. why get trained by kung lao. bio is a bit long. his fighting style is it like Bo Rai Cho or more like the character from doa3. like spike special move.neat match taunt. xray is a bit dull. not digging his primary attire but his alternate i am liking.

kimya - i like your fighting style. what was the spell Quan Chi cast on him. your alternate attire is better than your primary. xray is a bit bland. to many teleports. enjoyed victory pose. like the snake trap special.

komodo - i liked that your character is a mixed gender. i like the fighting style. fatal 1 is a bit to funny. enjoyed both attires. play dead special is a bit cheap. love the xray. like the victory pose.

kortika - i like that your character lives in the sea. fighting style is ok. enjoyed alternate attire more than primary. to many special moves. really enjoyed your xray. uses pincers to much. enjoyed entrance. to much lava.

krimson - like that your character is a merc. fighting style is ok. like the spark bombs special. decent fatality 1. entrance is a bit generic.

kruor - don't care for his leaping smash special. interesting fighting style. both attires are good. xray is great. victory pose is a bit cheesy.

krustacean - interesting bio. moon cheese!!!!!!!!!!!!!! neat fighting style could be explained more. love the moonwalk special. fatality 2 is genious. to many claw attacks. enjoyed the alternate attire more than the primary.

kuwinda - like the realm she came from. fighting style is ok. like primary outfit. dislike the alternate outfit. geo kick special is pretty cool. enjoyed xray. to much use of axes.

that was alot of typing and got a bunch more to do. not hating any characters. just giving feedback good and bad. hope you enjoyed.

Yeah I can review Shoulen no problem. Might not be until this evening though as I wrote Tao Fei's review on my lunch break.

If anyone else wants a review similar to IndyRI's just hit me up here or in PM.

Mojo6 can you do my KAK Keilenaten too, or must i wait til her match?

Thanks Mojo6! Be as ruthless as you possibly can. But if you need more explanation on anything then let me know!

Thanks!