On behalf of the 100+ users in the competition...

Can you analyze all of the characters?



hahahaha!

Well played sir, well played.

just reading over my bio i don't think i did it right
i just gave a summary of her story (which ruins the ending by giving it away)
and i accidentally put some of her fighting style in there.
hope you guys can overlook this!

My character's story explains how she developed her fighting style(In a longer version beneath the normal one), I don't see it as a problem. Anyone who does use that against you is just desperately searching out and clinging to whatever negative they can find and should be disregarded.

Here are the rest of my pointers for the prelim characters. Phew, that was quite the undertaking.

Levyatan:

Pros:
- Bio is straight-forward and easy to understand. I would like to hear more about Levyatan’s race and his king.
- I like the warrior/conqueror side to Levyatan. He just wants kill everyone he can.
- Mendax and Ligo are moves with lots of potential
- The use of Latin names for your moves. I would put a translation next to them just so everyone understands what they mean.
- Fatality 1 is strong but it took me a few reads to understand how it works. Maybe edit it a bit.

Cons:
- Lacks conflict and place in the bio. Why hasn’t he been challenged yet? What part of Outworld is he from? Is his race under Shao Kahn’s rule?
- Since his look is comprised of many aspects of other characters’ costumes, there really isn’t anything that makes him stand out.
- Two moves are projectiles out of five
- X-ray isn’t captivating and 6 hits is a lot for that kind of move
- Since you don’t give any background on the two kingdoms in the ending, it sounds dull. Expand a little and edit, you use the words ‘army’, ‘enemy’ and ‘kingdom’ many times.

Lonin Regon:

Pros:
- I like the underground fight club angle.
- A sloppy fighting style would be fun to play with.
- I love the image of Lonin just wailing on a downed opponent in his x-ray. However, it’s not clear in your description how they end up on their stomach so he can pound the back of their head.
- Fatality 1 is nice and brutal. Go into more detail like having the opponent’s eyes popping out and blood oozing out as Lonin jams his thumbs into their throat.

Cons:
- Not sure if his full name works. I like Lonin however.
- He’s a fighter-for-the-sake-of-fighting stereotype. Not much makes him rise above this.
- The watch and his character do not mesh well. Why does a brawler who doesn’t give a shit have a magical watch? Maybe explain where it comes from.
- The watch-specific moves and fatality are uninteresting. There’s huge potential for thinking up some moves that highlight his rough and sloppy fighting style.
- While Raiden is not omnipotent, he still has very high powers of perception. He would know that Ronin is not stable enough to be the Protector of Earthrealm. There’s not enough reason for the Thunder God to promote him.

Neuros

Pros:
- Obviously a strong and well thought-out bio.
- The Nexus scene is a great part of the intro and an excellent explanation for his portal powers and madness.
- Smooth work putting other characters from MK into the bio.
- Nice use of Noob’s ending from MK9 to further Neuros’ story.
- Both costumes are great and a nice contrast to the character. The small details like carving his chest and his animal like feet add even more depth to the character.
- I’m not a fan of the kusarigama but I do like the details in the Kusarigama Hook move.
- Nexus moves are imaginative and useful.
- I really do like Fatality 1 for many reasons but I can not suspend my disbelief enough to have someone still alive while their brain is out of their skull.
- Babality is cute and unique.

Cons:
- Conflict with the Great Kung Lao seems weak and forced.
- Why did Shang Tsung pick Neuros out specifically? He oversaw the 9 Mortal Kombat tournaments before Goro’s loss to the Great Kung Lao so I think he would how to use his magic after centuries of fighting and scheming.
- I don’t see Chaosrealmers having apprentices, at least not in the usual sense. It’s too much of an orderly set-up.
- The kusarigama addition is cool but it doesn’t mesh well with Neuros. There’s no explanation for why he has it other than, well, he needs a long distance weapon. It adds one more layer to an already loaded character and it makes him feel overpowered.
- I thought of adding the input for moves into my entry as well. But all it does is bog the descriptions down.
- The x-ray is disorienting. It needs to be cleaned up and the ability to do only when ‘shifting’ needs to be elaborated. Does it mean he can only do it during his shift charge?
- Fatality 2 is impossible. All three actions happen at the same time but some are dependant on the other two actions having already been performed. Rework.
- Ending sounds like a lot of the MK Armageddon endings and that’s not a good thing. There’s also a big difference between madness and chaos.

Onyx:

Pros:
- A black, vampiric golem is definitely a unique mix and his name fits perfectly with his description.
- I like the backstory but it leaves me wanting more. Who were these sorcerers that opposed Shao Kahn? Were there other golems? Did Onyx sleep in a temple buried deep in Outworld?
- Onyx Impalet is a very cool move. Good use of his powers of stone.
- Moves fit with his fighting style quite nicely.

Cons
- If he is bound to his makers’ whims, how is he acting on his own? Shang Tsung is one of Kahn’s followers and Onyx is programmed to destroy him.
- It’s a little confusing to what gives Onyx flesh. You use ‘life force’ a lot but then mention souls in the end. I’m guessing that you’re just using a fancy term for souls. You also do not take advantage of that character quirk in his moves or fatalities unless fatality 1 is how it works. Does someone turn to stone when Onyx drains their soul? He also seems to be able to switch from stone to flesh with ease in his moves negating the fact that he needs souls to do so.
- The hieroglyphics and kanji on his body is overkill and doesn’t make any sense (why would an ancient Outworld tribe use characters from two separate Earthrealm languages?) I would throw some Outworld ideograms on his body that are inspired by Japanese and Egyptian script or get rid of them entirely.
- Ending is clichéd good guy becomes even worse tyrant than the person he overthrew. What happens to his programming after Kahn is defeated? Will he ever become flesh or is he doomed to keep feeding on souls? Elaborate on Tsungs betrayal to make it more interesting.

Psionic:

Pros:
- There is the potential for an interesting character here. If you go into detail about the order of Psi and its connection to the MK tournament, it would help flesh Psionic out.
- The connection to Raiden’s visions is interesting. Definitely expand on that. How is he intercepting the flashbacks from the future?
- His entrance where he says, "I have already foreseen your death!" is a nice quote.

Cons:
- Character is incomplete.
- No move descriptions.
- X-ray and fatalities are rudimentary and boring.
- “I am Psionic, a Psychic warrior from Earthrealm, I come from a secret clan of psychic Ninjas called the Order of the Psi and I am a [sic] Avatar of the Psionic-Force...” Complete overkill with the psychic theme.
- How is the ending narrated if all of creation is consumed?

Shade:

Pros:
- His story of stealth guerilla tactics is a breath of fresh air as far as MK origins are concerned. I especially like the mythos he’s creating amongst the Tarkatans. Maybe explore that a bit more.
- Phurba is a good choice of weapon, especially because the shaolin monks are Buddhists.
- The Tarkatan teeth are a nice touch to his costume but how are they metal?
- Chi Orb is a nice twist on the same old projectile moves.
- The ending ties into the MK world nicely. I still feel Shade needs more motivation for his attacks against the Outworlders.

Cons:
- Shaolin is one word. It’s distracting to see it as two.
- His name is Shade and he’s all about stealth; he should not have white arm-wraps in his main costume.
- Most of his moves, x-ray and fatalities lack oomph. I would incorporate his immense speed into some of them. For instance, his x-ray could have him blurring away when his opponent tries to hit him.
- Fatality 2 could be more brutal. Have him break bones or punch through flesh while he’s zipping around hitting different parts of the opponent.
- Shade’s reveal to Shao Kahn is anticlimactic. This is how it comes across:
“Die Tyrant!”

“And you are?”

"Shade, the shaolin warrior terrorizing your countryside."

"Still not following."

"I trained along Liu Kang and the other Order of -"

"So you're Liu Kang?"

"Uhhh, no..."

"That's too bad. I hate that guy."

*Shade stabs him with a phurba.*

Well as I stated before, I'm personally looking more at appearance and gameplay potential, which includes:
-General fighting style description
-Special moves
-X-ray
-Fatalities

Although a great story and ending will def. boost your score. Pretty the only two things that I would be bothered by story wise are:
1) A ripoff of another character's story (i.e. if I picture an already established character INSTEAD of your character while reading your bio, even if it's a character outside of the MK universe)
2) Something so outlandish and/or poorly written that I'm just staring at my screen like

I know other people are judging more on story, but seeing as I've never cared a whole lot for MK bios/stories anyways (they've never been that good), I focus more on what I would actually see and experience playing as the character.

@Harle thanks!! youre right! :) that really helped!



well i THINK you will like my character i hope you will tell me when you read her!

i focused a little more on gameplay because i imagined if i could make a brand new character how will she fair against kung lao for example.
so rush in, counters, an xray that can be combo'd into etc
her appearance looks like a typical MK girl cause i thought that's how she would "fit in" with everyone lol

Her story is somewhat solid, i only gave as much info (bio/story) as the game does. i added a "in game bio" (like if Serenity was actually in the game what you would read when looking at her model) as well as my summary. Also when i wrote her ending i imagined the announcer reading it, so that gave me an idea of how to write it.

Sounds good to me

crow, I sent you my edited version, if its to late I understand.

I wasn't able to send it earlier because I couldn't use my computer a while, I was still posting on here using my iPod though.


I added something to my characters "Second Half" to really give it personality.

All the kombatants in the preliminary are very creative. Great job to all and congrats to the chosen few that will fight in the tournament. See you in the arena!

surprised how these 13 are different from each other too!

But with another 96 coming, there are bound to be a few that are similar to each other.


If anyone wants to see my picture's early, You'll have to join/like my 'Mortal Kombat: Next Generation' facebook page :P

I'm sorry you guys didnt enjoy Eternus! I tried though! Enjoy the rest of the tournament.

I think Eternus still made it in

Yeah, if the non-official recount is right, Eternus is the 9th... and after a fail-check of a previous entry, the 9th takes his spot. Eternus is still in

I think eternus is still in!! :)

1) Adsler
2) Neuros
3) Onyx
4) Shade
5) Alexandra
6) Clyde
7) Komodo
8) Kimya
9) Eternus
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10) Lonin Regon
11) Levyatan
12) Bachi Li
13) Psionic


Due to Sycho's elimination (he has no bio as well as no statistical data, therefore he is too incomplete of a character in my opinion), Eternus will take his spot and move into the final field of 96. Congratulations to the 9 creators who survived elimination and thanks to the other 4 for entering the contest! In my next post, I will reveal the actual bracket, so you can see who you'll be up against. Within the next couple of days, I hope to reveal all the characters. This has been a busy week for me, but I'm nearly done with everyone.

I'm excited to see how everything will play out. Thanks Crow for devoting so much time into this. Keep it up!

Brackets revealed

There are three brackets. The three characters who win each bracket will meet in a "triple threat" sort of end match where there will be only one winner, so take a gander at who you'll be facing. I realize not knowing anything about the other characters yet makes seeing who you'll be facing less interesting, but give me a couple of days to finish everyone's. Mick-Lucifer had been helping me, but has taken ill and I haven't heard from him in a few days so this is all solo at the moment. I'll have it done as soon as I can.

Voting facts:

There were 51 people who voted. 6 of those people are not kompetitors in this tournament (that includes two of the judges). Of the 45 entrants that voted, 5 were in the preliminary round. They were:

ediblue with Alexandra
RealMeenaMileena with Komodo
AlphonZeus with Lonin Regon
Kamionero with Adsler
RyanAutumns with Psionic

Not a bad turn-out. Much better than some elections I've voted in

idk if i should be excited or nervous knowing who my character is facing off

Neat. I'm one of the few without a horse in this race.

My votes can be bought by pestering Boon on twitter to release Lady in Purple as dlc. lol no jk.

Well this is awesome. Let Mortal Kombat begin....

I too don't if too be happy or scare with my opponent.

I am facing Krimson from daryui..... Well partna, it'll be a pleasure fighting your opponent.

*Shoulen ~vs~ Erzhära*

Kick some ass Shoulen!

ShaoKahnhurtmyfeelings already let some info slip on their char. Sounds like Ekibyogami is based on plagues and disease, specifically Biblical ones.

Don't know if that makes you feel any more prepared.

thanks that makes feel better prepared a bit

but even a crappy character can be saved by good writing so if shaokahnhurtmyfeelings can write well then im preeetty much screwed
(not saying that his/her character is crappy of course lol)