Will do, Annette is the last of the main competition I will be reviewing at this point, so I'll probably have your review by Wednesday, after I've reviewed Khibok, Malice, and Annette

@Ab Horrence I'll probably do a review of Yaray, if you're open to it(p.s. if you have notes on Deon or would like to review him, I'd be keen on that too) and then 'll be officially done doing reviews for offical tournament characters.

I'll get to that other thread in due course no worries acid

Then we both shall review each other's characters. I'll try and have Deon done in the next day or two.

My review of Malice for longlivequeensindel

Bio: This bio from jump Street is a fresh and original effort, there has not been a story of jealously in Mortal Kombat and jealously is sometimes just as much of a motivator as revenge for making characters do desperate things. The bio is was a refreshing change of pace.


Fighting style: This is intriguing because it’s like having two characters for the price of one and this section is well written, easy to follow and it gives the reader a good feel for her style(s). I noticed that her and he was used, interesting that one personality is male and the other female, a very intriguing section to read through.

Costumes: I really do love your designs, they’re some of the most inventive looks I’ve seen and they really would be a welcome change of pace in the sphere of MK, Malice’s hair Is glorious. I love all the little details, like the straps, metal symbols and how her costume is a straight jacket turned fashionable, superbly done design wise. Though I think an alternate that catered more to her former spy days would have been a good choice.

Specials: I nice assortment of moves that take advantage of her two very different styles of combat, I could picture her being a total pain to fight due to the nature of her styles. The mind manipulation powers are well done and something intriguing we haven’t seen before in MK, I remember reading about Night Terrors in psychology and I think it’s great to see a fictional character incorporate real life elements into their tool set. I’m curious are the lances apart of her?


X-Ray: Is an interesting and unique X-ray that blends Malice’s skill set rather well, though at certain parts I wasn’t quite sure what was happening, perhaps it was the wording or I’m just not getting it, but I think a more clear description would benefit this X-ray aside from that, well done.

Fatalities: Pretty gruesome and some of the most original and well thought out fatalities I’ve read. The Crucify fatality is brilliant, very unique and fitting fatalities.

Taunts: Creepy, clever and well done, her taunts are play off of her split personalities quite well and she comes off as a very intimidating warrior.

Ending: The ending was pretty good, certainly brought the character full circle and instead of killing Shao Kahn she brings him down below her level, turning him into her lover once more, interesting change of pace from the usual of simply killing Shao Kahn. It’s also nice to see Quan Chi not outsmart the character this go round, a unique spin on the arcade ending with some fresh new ideas that MK hasn’t really touched, it’s not lengthy but it says a lot about the character and her development.

Overall: Malice is a pretty top shelf character as it stands she has a solid costume, innovative background, abilities, and fatalities. Her taunts are creepy and very befitting of her fighting style and deranged nature. Malice hits the mark on essentially every field, but I think Malice could benefit from having a costume that played off of her former assassin past. I don’t find myself with any major complaints to make in regards to this character, it’s clear the level of thought and intricate detail that was put into this creation and a very noteworthy addition indeed.







Sounds good to me, I should have Yaray's done by Wednesday, I'm a bit behind, I sitll gotta finish Khibok and Annette, but fortunately I just finished Malice.

My review of Khibok for McHotcakes

Bio: This bio is a great example of having a lengthy bio, but making it interesting and enjoyable to read and I was motivated to keep reading because of how engaging your story telling was. I am a huge fan of how you blended human legends into your character and it seems rational and very realistic, fiction that can appear to have a plausible basis in reality is the best kind in my view. I found his connection to the great Kung Lao rather intriguing and I remember you saying your character was kind of speaking for animal and environmental preservation, a very ambitious and well written effort indeed. You not only managed to get a very pressing political matter addressed, but you did so while also creating a unique, engaging bio and none of it felt forced or rushed. I think this is one of the most well written bios of the contest, spelling and punctuation.

Fighting style: Described with coherent and easy to follow detail. It conveyed Khibok’s style and described how he fights in brief, excellent details, nicely done.

Costumes: Both costumes are superbly designed, but I feel that his alternate with the red and yellow vest is his best look as it gives a more unique look from his primary. Khibok reminds me of the apes from the movie the Congo, which is pretty awesome and his distinct look makes him a very memorable character, love the bamboo stick and the shorts/pants .

Specials: A unique array of special moves are present in this section, Khibok’s specials seem to fit him like a glove, Khibok comes off as a heavy hitter and possibly a grappler but also incorporating the acrobatic movements you describe in Khibok’s fighting style, a solid tool set.

X-Ray: This X-ray stands on its own, it’s unique and quite brutal with the organs rupturing, nobody does a bear hug type of grab, which is a welcome addition and the hand claps really set it off and complete the whole scene.

Fatalities: Unique fatalities in their own right, the first one is particularly gruesome. Both are well done and fit the character well.
Taunts: A nice array of taunts that display Khibok’s primal side as well as his intelligent, martial arts warrior side as well.

Ending: I liked his ending, it was straightforward and to the point, but his story comes full circle and it’s one of those endings that really feels rewarding to experience both for the player and the in game character.

Overall: I feel that this character is done well in their execution from specials, bio, fatalities, etc. I don’t feel there’s much for me to add in the way of improvement for the character, Khibok is a distinct and original character that was very competently crafted, your knack for storytelling is one of the key points that really got me with Khibok.

I apologize that I don’t have much to say in means of improvement, though I don’t see anything worth mentioning that needs improvement.

I hope my review was helpful, take care.

Thanks for the review Espio. I'm glad that you liked my character, it appears Khibok came off just as I hoped he would.

On a side note the outfit with the vest actually was his primary. But that was more of my fault as I don't think I described each outfit very well and just went with general appearance.

I think if I am going to have a chance at the next tournament I'll start working on my new characters storyline now. Hopefully I'll see you in the next one.

BUMP!

So is Crow gonna do anymore reviews or is this thing done?

^^^word...wuddup

i think people forgot about this thread or people are just busy.