My review of Tyron Magnum from the other thread.
Note: If anybody would like a review just let me know.
My review of Torment from the other thread
Note: If anybody would like a review just let me know.
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My review of Tyron Magnum
Bio: Pretty solid story telling. His connection to Johnny Cage is subtle, but very believable and tying Tyron having a non-speaking role in Ninja Mime was rather clever. I like how he's a military brat, but would rather go off and do his own thing instead of just following tradition.
Fighting Style: Boxing is an unrepresented type of fighting in MK, the originality is a huge boost to your character.
Primary costume: Gets the job done and the product placement adds are an interesting touch.
Alternate: I love the alternate description, it's my fav of the two costumes.
Specials: Don't really care for the nunchuck throw, it just doesn't seem like it should be a projectile to me. I love the dog based special moves, very outside the box and original it reminds me of Jack Slate from Dead To Rights and how he used his dog Shadow to help attack opponents. I also like the Muay Thai grab
X-ray: speaks well to Tyron's abilities and is pretty unique, targeting the tendos was something different and executed well.
Fatalities are pretty straightforward and actually fit your character's specials and attitude, the second is particularly nasty.
Entrance taunt: I love it, Tyron is dripping with personaltiy and attiude, very appealing in that regard and it made me smirk.
mid-match taunt: also made me laugh, I love the attitude, really won me over with that.
Victory pose: I don't know why, but I just don't like the idea of Omen peeing on the opponent, just not feeling it.
Ending: Certainly delighted by the plot twist and how his ending stopped with a cliff hanger, leaving him with something unfinished, you worked your character into the canon nicely, without throwing things off.
Closing comments: You should certainly be proud of your character, unique specials, great personality, nice plot twists for story, fatalities fit character's style well, X-ray stands on its own as unique. Connection to Johnny Cage was clever and a reference to Ninja Mime and Johnny Cage was appreciated.
My complaints were minor and I won't repeat them.
Overall, your character is a well rounded and unique addition to the cast and a very high quality entry.
I hope my feedback helps and best of luck to you
My review of Tyron Magnum
Bio: Pretty solid story telling. His connection to Johnny Cage is subtle, but very believable and tying Tyron having a non-speaking role in Ninja Mime was rather clever. I like how he's a military brat, but would rather go off and do his own thing instead of just following tradition.
Fighting Style: Boxing is an unrepresented type of fighting in MK, the originality is a huge boost to your character.
Primary costume: Gets the job done and the product placement adds are an interesting touch.
Alternate: I love the alternate description, it's my fav of the two costumes.
Specials: Don't really care for the nunchuck throw, it just doesn't seem like it should be a projectile to me. I love the dog based special moves, very outside the box and original it reminds me of Jack Slate from Dead To Rights and how he used his dog Shadow to help attack opponents. I also like the Muay Thai grab
X-ray: speaks well to Tyron's abilities and is pretty unique, targeting the tendos was something different and executed well.
Fatalities are pretty straightforward and actually fit your character's specials and attitude, the second is particularly nasty.
Entrance taunt: I love it, Tyron is dripping with personaltiy and attiude, very appealing in that regard and it made me smirk.
mid-match taunt: also made me laugh, I love the attitude, really won me over with that.
Victory pose: I don't know why, but I just don't like the idea of Omen peeing on the opponent, just not feeling it.
Ending: Certainly delighted by the plot twist and how his ending stopped with a cliff hanger, leaving him with something unfinished, you worked your character into the canon nicely, without throwing things off.
Closing comments: You should certainly be proud of your character, unique specials, great personality, nice plot twists for story, fatalities fit character's style well, X-ray stands on its own as unique. Connection to Johnny Cage was clever and a reference to Ninja Mime and Johnny Cage was appreciated.
My complaints were minor and I won't repeat them.
Overall, your character is a well rounded and unique addition to the cast and a very high quality entry.
I hope my feedback helps and best of luck to you
My review of Torment from the other thread
Espio872 Wrote:
My feedback on Torment as requested:
Bio: pretty straightforward, interesting explanation for his powers as an evoulutionary occurence. Not much I can say on this part, it accomplishes its goal of giving him a reason to fight and his powers.
Fighting style:I don't get much of a feel for how Torment primarily fights, I just wish a bit more was included.
Primary cosutme:Decent, it fits what your characters abilities are and it would be interesting to see such a creature incorporated into MK.
Alternate: Nice to see he has a human and spider costume, always welcome to have very diverse, story relevant costumes.
Special Moves: Excellent use of specials, would make for an interesting anti-air character.
X-ray: pretty straightforward and brutal, this X-ray really highlights your character's skill set well.
Fatalities: The first is quite inventive and very well done, I love the originaltiy.
The second fatality was okay.
Ending: Bittersweet, also pretty straightforward and accomplishes its goal
Overall closing comments: Torment is a nice addition to the contest and he brings something new to the table in terms of speicals, gameplay,
appearence, and fatalities.
Good luck.
My feedback on Torment as requested:
Bio: pretty straightforward, interesting explanation for his powers as an evoulutionary occurence. Not much I can say on this part, it accomplishes its goal of giving him a reason to fight and his powers.
Fighting style:I don't get much of a feel for how Torment primarily fights, I just wish a bit more was included.
Primary cosutme:Decent, it fits what your characters abilities are and it would be interesting to see such a creature incorporated into MK.
Alternate: Nice to see he has a human and spider costume, always welcome to have very diverse, story relevant costumes.
Special Moves: Excellent use of specials, would make for an interesting anti-air character.
X-ray: pretty straightforward and brutal, this X-ray really highlights your character's skill set well.
Fatalities: The first is quite inventive and very well done, I love the originaltiy.
The second fatality was okay.
Ending: Bittersweet, also pretty straightforward and accomplishes its goal
Overall closing comments: Torment is a nice addition to the contest and he brings something new to the table in terms of speicals, gameplay,
appearence, and fatalities.
Good luck.
My character review of Abyss for Miko2668.
Bio: At first I was expecting some sort of revenge story on the Special Forces, fortunately you went in a unique direction and created your character to have redemption as his motive, he doesn't blame other people for his misdeeds, he takes responsibiltiy for them and changes his ways, this quickly establishes a very relatable and human character for me and made me intrigued to see what was in store for Abyss, nicely done.
I also really enjoyed how you correlated his bone breaking into his after-life abilities, very clever and felt very fluid and natural.
Fighting Style: A very original concept for a fighting style, using your ribs and spine as weapons truly piqued my interest, my only issue with this very unique style is that it seems lmpractical to visualize Abyss using his spine as a weapon. He seems lick a tricksters character and I really liked that you did a suitable job of describing him as a balanced character (able to keep away, yet play aggressive), really helps to get a feel for how he'd play in game.
Primary Costume: It's a nice costume, reminds me of Drahmin's look, yet its distinct enough from Drahmin to make Abyss his own Oni demon.
Alternate Costume: I like that his alternate appearence ties nicely into his Oni form with subtle details like the hair. He looks like a brawler with leg wraps and armor, which works for his Black Dragon history, I love when character has costumes that are story relevant.
Specials: A very well rounded moveset, giving Abyss good defensive options and offensive tools. His attacks are unique and give us a nice balance of his bone manipulation powers.
X-ray: A truly original creation indeed, I found it relatively easy to visualize (aside from the spin lasso), but it was pretty gross and very well done overall and it gets high praise for its originality and gross effects. I apologize for mentioning my difficulty of mentioning the spine lasso, I just have a difficult time picturing it.
Fatality 1: Great show, it reminds me of Sareena's difficulty to control her demon form ( I mean this in the most completementary light possible). I like that your fatality reminds me of the iron maiden torture device and the Oni consuming the victim's flesh just adds to the creepy nature of the fatality.
Fatality 2: The fatality is decent, though I'm having a bit of diffculty picturing how it would play out at some parts.
Entrance taunt: Short, but to the point and encompasses what the character's struggle to be a civilized entity and suppress his primal Oni urges, I approve.
Mid-Match taunt: Same thoughts as the entrance taunt
Victory pose: Scary and unique victory pose, consistent with his lack of control over his Oni nature.
Ending: His ending brings his redemption story full circle and the pay off of regaining his humanity as a reward for defeating Shao Kahn was a nice touch and set up Abyss to have a future in the series.
Closing remarks: I really like Abyss, redemption characters pulled off well are my favorite, it instills so much hope and really makes a character feel more human to me. His specials are unique and fresh. My complaints were minor and were not worthy of mentioning again, this is another pretty solid character and I'm very impressed with this character, best of luck to you.
P.S. if anybody would like a character review, do not hesitate to ask
Bio: At first I was expecting some sort of revenge story on the Special Forces, fortunately you went in a unique direction and created your character to have redemption as his motive, he doesn't blame other people for his misdeeds, he takes responsibiltiy for them and changes his ways, this quickly establishes a very relatable and human character for me and made me intrigued to see what was in store for Abyss, nicely done.
I also really enjoyed how you correlated his bone breaking into his after-life abilities, very clever and felt very fluid and natural.
Fighting Style: A very original concept for a fighting style, using your ribs and spine as weapons truly piqued my interest, my only issue with this very unique style is that it seems lmpractical to visualize Abyss using his spine as a weapon. He seems lick a tricksters character and I really liked that you did a suitable job of describing him as a balanced character (able to keep away, yet play aggressive), really helps to get a feel for how he'd play in game.
Primary Costume: It's a nice costume, reminds me of Drahmin's look, yet its distinct enough from Drahmin to make Abyss his own Oni demon.
Alternate Costume: I like that his alternate appearence ties nicely into his Oni form with subtle details like the hair. He looks like a brawler with leg wraps and armor, which works for his Black Dragon history, I love when character has costumes that are story relevant.
Specials: A very well rounded moveset, giving Abyss good defensive options and offensive tools. His attacks are unique and give us a nice balance of his bone manipulation powers.
X-ray: A truly original creation indeed, I found it relatively easy to visualize (aside from the spin lasso), but it was pretty gross and very well done overall and it gets high praise for its originality and gross effects. I apologize for mentioning my difficulty of mentioning the spine lasso, I just have a difficult time picturing it.
Fatality 1: Great show, it reminds me of Sareena's difficulty to control her demon form ( I mean this in the most completementary light possible). I like that your fatality reminds me of the iron maiden torture device and the Oni consuming the victim's flesh just adds to the creepy nature of the fatality.
Fatality 2: The fatality is decent, though I'm having a bit of diffculty picturing how it would play out at some parts.
Entrance taunt: Short, but to the point and encompasses what the character's struggle to be a civilized entity and suppress his primal Oni urges, I approve.
Mid-Match taunt: Same thoughts as the entrance taunt
Victory pose: Scary and unique victory pose, consistent with his lack of control over his Oni nature.
Ending: His ending brings his redemption story full circle and the pay off of regaining his humanity as a reward for defeating Shao Kahn was a nice touch and set up Abyss to have a future in the series.
Closing remarks: I really like Abyss, redemption characters pulled off well are my favorite, it instills so much hope and really makes a character feel more human to me. His specials are unique and fresh. My complaints were minor and were not worthy of mentioning again, this is another pretty solid character and I'm very impressed with this character, best of luck to you.
P.S. if anybody would like a character review, do not hesitate to ask
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If you (or anyone) have some time, i would love a review for De Kai & De Kio :)
Espio872 Wrote:
I'll have that ready for you sometime tonight.
KnightMysterio Wrote:
I wouldn't mind a review of my character, Kayatsu.
I wouldn't mind a review of my character, Kayatsu.
I'll have that ready for you sometime tonight.
If you (or anyone) have some time, i would love a review for De Kai & De Kio :)
Ask and you shall receive my good sir
I'll try to have yours ready sometime tonight as well.
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My review of Kevshi for Acidslayer
Bio: The bio, while interesting doesn't give us much on Kevshi, why did he go insane? I'm not sure if it was because Kenshi ocershadowed him or because of all the people he murdered, it would also help if you elaborated on what made Kevshi take a very different path from Kenshi, a little more elaboration would help get the reader more involved.
Fighting style: I think this is a section that could use more elaboration, when introducing a new style to your audience, it's important to give a detailed and extensive explanation and how tae Kwan do works with this style.
Costumes: The huge contrast to kenshi's look is welcomed as making characters distinct is very important, I'm picturing him as more of a character with an anime feel (which isn't a bad thing) though for Mortal Kombat I'm not sure how that translates.
Special moves: Some rather interesting specials like the bone prison and the acidic pentagram made good use of his dark powers, the Snake and skull summon were interesting and reminded me of Harry Potter, which I like. The Katana spin attack throws me off as it seems like a move Kenshi would have as aside from this move, there is no indication that Kevshi is a sword master as well as it wasn't mentioned in his fighting style or on his costume..
X-ray: It seems a bit bland in the sense that with him having such strange specials for his X-ray to not include some of his magical abilities, the chain being used as a weapon would be more fitting if it was apart of his special moves arsenal and I think this X-ray could of benefitted from the usage of Kevshi unique and prominent elements, like his dark magic.
Fatalities: i think they could have benefitted from use of his magic, the fatalities are decent, but I would really go a more mystical, dark magic route with them as it seems more befitting of the character.
Taunts: Suitable as is, not much to add on this matter.
Ending: I found this ending less than satisfying, it was too brief and left me wanting more. I know it's a minor detail, but I like for people to be specific when they discuss who they defeated, like "the boss". It could be Goro, Kintaro, Shang Tsung, Shao Kahn etc.
Overall: My review might come off as too negative or nitpicky, but I can assure you I mean no harm by it, I just think Kevshi could use some fine tuning. You did some nice things with his specials and giving him a distinct look, but unfortunately I found some sections lacking in his story, ending, X-ray, and fighting style.
Kevshi has potential and with some more time and effort I think this could be a truly unique character, despite his relation to Kenshi, you were on the right track with his specials and look, just drop the Katana and tk and go from there and Kevshi can be great.
I hope my review was helpful.
Bio: The bio, while interesting doesn't give us much on Kevshi, why did he go insane? I'm not sure if it was because Kenshi ocershadowed him or because of all the people he murdered, it would also help if you elaborated on what made Kevshi take a very different path from Kenshi, a little more elaboration would help get the reader more involved.
Fighting style: I think this is a section that could use more elaboration, when introducing a new style to your audience, it's important to give a detailed and extensive explanation and how tae Kwan do works with this style.
Costumes: The huge contrast to kenshi's look is welcomed as making characters distinct is very important, I'm picturing him as more of a character with an anime feel (which isn't a bad thing) though for Mortal Kombat I'm not sure how that translates.
Special moves: Some rather interesting specials like the bone prison and the acidic pentagram made good use of his dark powers, the Snake and skull summon were interesting and reminded me of Harry Potter, which I like. The Katana spin attack throws me off as it seems like a move Kenshi would have as aside from this move, there is no indication that Kevshi is a sword master as well as it wasn't mentioned in his fighting style or on his costume..
X-ray: It seems a bit bland in the sense that with him having such strange specials for his X-ray to not include some of his magical abilities, the chain being used as a weapon would be more fitting if it was apart of his special moves arsenal and I think this X-ray could of benefitted from the usage of Kevshi unique and prominent elements, like his dark magic.
Fatalities: i think they could have benefitted from use of his magic, the fatalities are decent, but I would really go a more mystical, dark magic route with them as it seems more befitting of the character.
Taunts: Suitable as is, not much to add on this matter.
Ending: I found this ending less than satisfying, it was too brief and left me wanting more. I know it's a minor detail, but I like for people to be specific when they discuss who they defeated, like "the boss". It could be Goro, Kintaro, Shang Tsung, Shao Kahn etc.
Overall: My review might come off as too negative or nitpicky, but I can assure you I mean no harm by it, I just think Kevshi could use some fine tuning. You did some nice things with his specials and giving him a distinct look, but unfortunately I found some sections lacking in his story, ending, X-ray, and fighting style.
Kevshi has potential and with some more time and effort I think this could be a truly unique character, despite his relation to Kenshi, you were on the right track with his specials and look, just drop the Katana and tk and go from there and Kevshi can be great.
I hope my review was helpful.
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My review of Serenity for Icegrenade
Bio: I like Serenity's bio immensely, she develops from an objective observer to compassionate protector and I love how much development she received. Her motives are intriguing and the fact that the gods are so stubborn about not preventing even their own destruction fits well with Serenity and I could see a plot like that developing as the Elder Gods are a stubborn lot. The bio was well written and easy to follow.
Fighting Style: I love your attention to detail, I really got a feel for how Serenity plays and it appears she can take out and put away her ring blade, which is an interesting strategic set up and her vital point targeting is a unique and welcome addition to the fighting styles of MK. A nice elaboration on her playstyle.
Costumes: Superbly done, I adore her costume with the hood over her head, the black and gold color scheme looks very elegant and regal, befitting of a goddess, she looks mysterious and dangerous. Her other costume is also very lovely, I adore the sleeves she has, her dress and hairstyle are superb and it's nice to see the contrast between the two looks, solid character design for sure.
Special moves: a superb blend of offensive and defensive tools round out her moveset, her time abilities are utilized to great effect.
X-ray: Pretty unique and original X-ray that speaks to her abilities and plenty brutal to boot, I love the ring blade finish, nicely done.
Fatalities: Both lovely fatalities, I specifically enjoyed Ageless the best, but both were executed well and were unique and welcome fatalities that compliment Serenity's skill set and her gameplay.
Taunts: Serenity shines in this field as well with the most original and creative taunts I think I've seen in this tourney, her win pose is genius, I love it. Her intro is both funny and super cool to picture, superbly done. I enjoyed her mid-match taunts as well.
Ending: Shows Serenity growing and developing superbly from a cold observer to a caring ally of Earth. The ending leaves the door open for Serenity to return and gives a nice hint that Serenity' involvement will bring about further consquences, short and to the point, it accomplishes so much for your character in such a short amount of text, that type of efficiency is superb.
Overall Serenity is as solid as a rock, superb designs, gameplay, story, etc. Serenity has the whole package deal and is presented with nice detail and excecution.
Serenity has certainly earned her place in this tournament as a top 12 competitor and you have much to be proud of with your creation.
p.s. I just realized our match is coming up like tonight lol and I wanted to wish you the best of luck, but with the level of originality and intelligence you put into Serenity, you don't need it, take care and I hope my review was helpful, good luck
My review of Serenity for Icegrenade
Bio: I like Serenity's bio immensely, she develops from an objective observer to compassionate protector and I love how much development she received. Her motives are intriguing and the fact that the gods are so stubborn about not preventing even their own destruction fits well with Serenity and I could see a plot like that developing as the Elder Gods are a stubborn lot. The bio was well written and easy to follow.
Fighting Style: I love your attention to detail, I really got a feel for how Serenity plays and it appears she can take out and put away her ring blade, which is an interesting strategic set up and her vital point targeting is a unique and welcome addition to the fighting styles of MK. A nice elaboration on her playstyle.
Costumes: Superbly done, I adore her costume with the hood over her head, the black and gold color scheme looks very elegant and regal, befitting of a goddess, she looks mysterious and dangerous. Her other costume is also very lovely, I adore the sleeves she has, her dress and hairstyle are superb and it's nice to see the contrast between the two looks, solid character design for sure.
Special moves: a superb blend of offensive and defensive tools round out her moveset, her time abilities are utilized to great effect.
X-ray: Pretty unique and original X-ray that speaks to her abilities and plenty brutal to boot, I love the ring blade finish, nicely done.
Fatalities: Both lovely fatalities, I specifically enjoyed Ageless the best, but both were executed well and were unique and welcome fatalities that compliment Serenity's skill set and her gameplay.
Taunts: Serenity shines in this field as well with the most original and creative taunts I think I've seen in this tourney, her win pose is genius, I love it. Her intro is both funny and super cool to picture, superbly done. I enjoyed her mid-match taunts as well.
Ending: Shows Serenity growing and developing superbly from a cold observer to a caring ally of Earth. The ending leaves the door open for Serenity to return and gives a nice hint that Serenity' involvement will bring about further consquences, short and to the point, it accomplishes so much for your character in such a short amount of text, that type of efficiency is superb.
Overall Serenity is as solid as a rock, superb designs, gameplay, story, etc. Serenity has the whole package deal and is presented with nice detail and excecution.
Serenity has certainly earned her place in this tournament as a top 12 competitor and you have much to be proud of with your creation.
p.s. I just realized our match is coming up like tonight lol and I wanted to wish you the best of luck, but with the level of originality and intelligence you put into Serenity, you don't need it, take care and I hope my review was helpful, good luck
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thanks for the review. i wanted him to feel different than kenshi. so i gave him a unique look. some of my favorite games are anime like guilty gear for example.
the fighting style was hard to describe but if i could explain it better i'd say it's more like zappa from guilty gear and hwoarang from tekken. zappa uses his style in the way he moves is like a centipede and he can contort his body in various ways. hwoarang uses tai kwan doe. it's that typle of style kevshi uses a various akward movements but fights with tai kwan doe.
the fatalitys,xrays could of been way better.
his story and bio i knew would be lousy. i'm just not good on creating stories so i focus more on moves and appearance.
to answer some of your questions.
he uses tk because he has the same blood as his brother. which i think would be neat if they explore how kenshi got his tk. think of it more like x-men it's a gene mutation.
the sword part i thought would be neat if he had a weapon like his brother but be different. that's why i incorperated it into his moveset.
why he became evil. he lost his sense of pain. he felt his honer was betrayed in the since he was overshadowed by his brother kenshi. kenshi more good and kevshi more evil. he dispises his brother and wanted to learn more skills in combat which his brother disaproved.
hope that answers some of your questions. i only made the character in an hour and if i put more time into him he may of been better. thanks for the review. also i don't find you being harsh at all. you were quite helpfull.
the fighting style was hard to describe but if i could explain it better i'd say it's more like zappa from guilty gear and hwoarang from tekken. zappa uses his style in the way he moves is like a centipede and he can contort his body in various ways. hwoarang uses tai kwan doe. it's that typle of style kevshi uses a various akward movements but fights with tai kwan doe.
the fatalitys,xrays could of been way better.
his story and bio i knew would be lousy. i'm just not good on creating stories so i focus more on moves and appearance.
to answer some of your questions.
he uses tk because he has the same blood as his brother. which i think would be neat if they explore how kenshi got his tk. think of it more like x-men it's a gene mutation.
the sword part i thought would be neat if he had a weapon like his brother but be different. that's why i incorperated it into his moveset.
why he became evil. he lost his sense of pain. he felt his honer was betrayed in the since he was overshadowed by his brother kenshi. kenshi more good and kevshi more evil. he dispises his brother and wanted to learn more skills in combat which his brother disaproved.
hope that answers some of your questions. i only made the character in an hour and if i put more time into him he may of been better. thanks for the review. also i don't find you being harsh at all. you were quite helpfull.
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p.s. any other reviewers out there, it would be greatly appreciated if you'd throw your hats in to assist, I don't mind doing reviews(it's fun in fact), but alternative opinions on characters really help the creators get a general idea of things to improve upon and some may notice faults I missed or additionally provide better advice than myself. Since we're all a community, character reviews could possibly be reciprocated as it means everyone wins as opposed to just getting the opinion of one person.
I'm glad my reviews have been generally helpful and well received, thanks guys and gals, you have all been glorious.
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thanks for the review. i wanted him to feel different than kenshi. so i gave him a unique look. some of my favorite games are anime like guilty gear for example.
the fighting style was hard to describe but if i could explain it better i'd say it's more like zappa from guilty gear and hwoarang from tekken. zappa uses his style in the way he moves is like a centipede and he can contort his body in various ways. hwoarang uses tai kwan doe. it's that typle of style kevshi uses a various akward movements but fights with tai kwan doe.
the fatalitys,xrays could of been way better.
his story and bio i knew would be lousy. i'm just not good on creating stories so i focus more on moves and appearance.
to answer some of your questions.
he uses tk because he has the same blood as his brother. which i think would be neat if they explore how kenshi got his tk. think of it more like x-men it's a gene mutation.
the sword part i thought would be neat if he had a weapon like his brother but be different. that's why i incorperated it into his moveset.
why he became evil. he lost his sense of pain. he felt his honer was betrayed in the since he was overshadowed by his brother kenshi. kenshi more good and kevshi more evil. he dispises his brother and wanted to learn more skills in combat which his brother disaproved.
hope that answers some of your questions. i only made the character in an hour and if i put more time into him he may of been better. thanks for the review. also i don't find you being harsh at all. you were quite helpfull.
thanks for the review. i wanted him to feel different than kenshi. so i gave him a unique look. some of my favorite games are anime like guilty gear for example.
the fighting style was hard to describe but if i could explain it better i'd say it's more like zappa from guilty gear and hwoarang from tekken. zappa uses his style in the way he moves is like a centipede and he can contort his body in various ways. hwoarang uses tai kwan doe. it's that typle of style kevshi uses a various akward movements but fights with tai kwan doe.
the fatalitys,xrays could of been way better.
his story and bio i knew would be lousy. i'm just not good on creating stories so i focus more on moves and appearance.
to answer some of your questions.
he uses tk because he has the same blood as his brother. which i think would be neat if they explore how kenshi got his tk. think of it more like x-men it's a gene mutation.
the sword part i thought would be neat if he had a weapon like his brother but be different. that's why i incorperated it into his moveset.
why he became evil. he lost his sense of pain. he felt his honer was betrayed in the since he was overshadowed by his brother kenshi. kenshi more good and kevshi more evil. he dispises his brother and wanted to learn more skills in combat which his brother disaproved.
hope that answers some of your questions. i only made the character in an hour and if i put more time into him he may of been better. thanks for the review. also i don't find you being harsh at all. you were quite helpfull.
You're very welcome sir, now Hworang I remember from Tekken, that helps quite a bit.
I'm not sure if they ever did elaborate on Kenshi's telikinetic abilities' origin, but it would definitely be a good idea to add that to his story.
In regards to him being evil, his motivation is resentment at Kenshi's greatness, so he wanted to be everything Kenshi is not, I can appreciate that type of story telling very much, especially since it's a very common reaction to resent someone's success.
I'm pleased you gave such a detailed response and I'm so glad I could be of help, thank you for explaining things more clearly.
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Correction: I'm Like a Boss!
Espio872 Wrote:
I'll repost it in here, thanks for being so helpful with the reviews AB, you're a boss.
Ab_Horrence Wrote:
@Espio Should I link to the Cerastes one or do you just want to copy it into here like your others?
@Espio Should I link to the Cerastes one or do you just want to copy it into here like your others?
I'll repost it in here, thanks for being so helpful with the reviews AB, you're a boss.
Correction: I'm Like a Boss!
This made me lol, and go
zerosebaz Wrote:
Wow, i forgot this trhead existed XD
Thank you for the review of De Kai & De Kio, i'll take your advice in some points. The costumes were probably their weakest part, so next time i'll work with the description and ask a friend of mine to draw my charachter. And the problem with the story i think it is the fact that they are still a concept, or they feel like it. They lack a relation with the rest of the cast and there are a lot of things about their past even i don't know.
I don't think you'll ever see them again, as i have another (completely diferent) charachter in my mind i might write for a future tournament, but still your coments were really apreciated :)
Oh, and i don't write in English as i would like to, but i do my best :)
Wow, i forgot this trhead existed XD
Thank you for the review of De Kai & De Kio, i'll take your advice in some points. The costumes were probably their weakest part, so next time i'll work with the description and ask a friend of mine to draw my charachter. And the problem with the story i think it is the fact that they are still a concept, or they feel like it. They lack a relation with the rest of the cast and there are a lot of things about their past even i don't know.
I don't think you'll ever see them again, as i have another (completely diferent) charachter in my mind i might write for a future tournament, but still your coments were really apreciated :)
Oh, and i don't write in English as i would like to, but i do my best :)
You are very welcome sir.
That's a good point and a very mature train of thought, you should be very proud of your creation and how fresh and original of a concept the two beings were.
I wouldn't mind seeing them again, but I'd also like to see what other innovative ideas you have to bring to the table, such a good read through.
Oh and about languages, your grasp of English is certainly better than my Spanish and French, I'm medicore at best in both languages, but they are quite lovely regardless
McHotcakes Wrote:
Might as well ask for a review of Khibok since he's out too.
Might as well ask for a review of Khibok since he's out too.
WIll have it posted by Sunday, just like Malice.
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