And I guess since I started the thread, I'll kick this shindig off with my runner up. He didn't make it into the tournament for two reasons. The first being that he was originally created as an entrant in the ninth Mortal Kombat. This would, of course, be set around fifty years before MK1. I couldn't think of a way, until last night, for him to fit into the MK9 timeline when he was supposed to be a character who fought way back in 1942. The second reason he wasn't entered is because Krustacean was just coming out of my head. I was a man possessed as I typed away at Krustacean's entry sheet. I'd just felt there was a NEED for a joke character.
Anyway, here's my boy, Blitz.

Character name: Blitz (Richter Krieg)
Gender: Male
Age: 97(Frozen in the year 1942 at the age of 28)
Height: 6'1"
Weight: 476lbs
Origin: Earthrealm
Alignment: Good(under Lin Kuei control, though)

Character bio: Like all journeys into the realm of scientific creation, the Cyber Initiative required a live test. The Grandmaster ordered a prisoner from the darkest reaches of the dungeons beneath the Lin Kuei fortress brought to the cyberneticists working on the project. The man was trapped in a mystical block of ice, and had been there longer than many members of the clan had lived. This man, so they said, was a human lightning rod, and was once one of their own. He was thawed and heavily sedated before undergoing the prototypical cyberization procedure. This prototype for the "cyborg ninja" the Lin Kuei were producing was to be designated LK-1A1, "Blitz". After a series of diagnostic testing was completed and a scan of his neural matrices revealed that he was completely loyal to the Grandmaster, the mechanized assassin was powered down and all records pertaining to the test purged. Sealed away far beneath the temple-fortress of the Lin Kuei, Blitz remained undisturbed until the invasion of Earthrealm by the forces of Shao Kahn. One of the cyberneticists who had taken part in the experiment that produced Blitz felt that to ally themselves with Shao Kahn, the Lin Kuei had doomed not only their home realm, but themselves. Despite being mortally wounded, he wrote extra protocols into Blitz's prime directives: Fight the invaders. Eliminate Shao Kahn.

Fighting style: A form of Muay Thai that incorporates the weaponry built into Blitz's frame. These include machine pistols mounted on the underside of his forearms and retractable whip-swords in the top part of his forearms.

Special moves:
Burst Fire: Fires a burst of rounds from forearm mounted machine pistols
Sustained Fire:(Enhanced Burst Fire) Fires a hail of bullets across the screen for higher hit chance(similar to Sub-Zero's freeze ray)
Shock: Grabs opponent and is struck by lightning, stunning the opponent.
Awe:(Enhanced Shock) Dashes midscreen to grab opponent, normal shock ensues.
Ride the Lightning: A bolt of lightning strikes Blitz and he vanishes, another bolt of lightning hits behind the opponent and Blitz appears.
Blitzkrieg:(Enhanced Ride the Lightning)Same as Ride the Lightning except the second bolt hits the opponent for a pop-up, placing Blitz in their position.
Blade Dance: Twirls a whip-sword about in front of him.
Seriously?:(Enhanced Blade Dance)Twirls both whip-swords around in a whirlwind of blades. Can be dash cancelled.
Golden Age: Holds one arm up high. A melee counter, if Blitz is hit with a melee attack, a bolt of lightning crashes from the sky, courses through him, and sends the opponent flying across the screen in a knockdown.
Silver Age:(Enhanced Golden Age) Holds both hands in the air. If hit with a ranged attack, Blitz is hit by lightning then shoots said bolt of electricity at the opponent.

X-ray attack: (The Two Most Painful Places...) Starts off by lashing out with a whip-sword, catching the enemy by the neck. He pulls them in and fires a single round into their knee-cap, shattering it. He then fires another, hollow-point, round into their abdomen. The second round can be seen shattering apart internally, shredding their insides.

Round entrance taunt: Appears kneeling and looks up. Eyes flash. Says, "Uplink: established. Target: confirmed" and stands.

Mid-match taunt: Is struck by lightning and, if too close to the fallen enemy, teleports away.

End-match taunt: Head begins twitching. "Mental locks: disengaged. Where am I? System": reestablished." Teleports away in a lightning bolt.

Fatalities:
The Tale of Ol' Sparky: Kicks the opponent's legs out from under them and quickly drops to one knee behind them. The opponent lands, sitting on Blitz's knee. He wraps the whipswords around the opponent and detaches them from his wrists, then grabs the top of the opponent's head with just his finger tips. He is struck with three consecutive bolts of lightning , and the electricity courses through, into the opponent's head. They convulse and begin foaming at the mouth with the first, begin smoking with the second, and are burnt to a crisp with the third.

Till I Find Tonsils: Lashes whip-sword out to wrap around the opponent's legs, then pulls tight to trip them. Blitz walks over to the downed opponent who looks up at him, begging. Blitz kneels beside them and puts one hand towards their face. He unloads round after round into the opponent's face. The head doesn't explode, but rather becomes something akin to a bowl of brain and face soup. This continues until you select something in the menu/the scene changes.


Character appearance: A matte black humanoid robot with dark green highlighting. Less sleek than the other cyborg Lin Kuei due to being a prototype. Belt-fed machine pistols mounted on the undersides of his forearms, the belts being fed from large drums on his back. Glowing blue eyes and a rather sinister face plate, looking like a stylized skull. Head wire dreadlocks are encased in a metal sheath that runs down the back of the head, opening at the base of his skull, so they hang hang down, rather than standing up. Armor plating is bulky with sharp angles, and the soles of his feet have small spikes, like cleats, to aid in climbing or rooting him to the ground.

Alternate costume: Human appearance. Has close cropped blonde hair and sweet mutton chops. Wearing a black sleeveless turtleneck with half of a dark green ninja "v" going up the left side of his torso. Has simple black combat pants and boots. Has two .45's tucked into the back of his belt, and two whip-swords running parallel down the back of the ninja "/".

Character ending: With Shao Kahn dead at his feet, Blitz's systems were attacked by his fallen enemy's essence. All the locks on his mind were broken, and like water when a dam is blown, his memories came flooding back. Years ago, Richter Krieg had prevented one of his Lin Kuei brothers from assassinating a prominent world leader. On the run, he'd participated in the Mortal Kombat that proved to be Outworld's ninth victory. He remembered a man who could manipulate cold. He remembered awakening from his long sleep. He remembered seeing the man he'd betrayed so many years ago. That man was responsible for making him the mechanical monster he is today. That man is the Lin Kuei Grandmaster. Now free of his slave protocols, Blitz would finally do what he could not decades before. Blitz was going to kill him.

Wow, really? No love for this thread?

Soon I shall love it. I've been trying to finish up my secondary character so I could post it here.

I also have a character to post, though they're so very incomplete at this point... My Annette had like... Eight rough drafts and three sex changes before she was complete.

A lot of people are probably hesitant to post their KAKs due to future tournaments. Though, even if you decide to post a KAK here or elsewhere on the internet, it doesn't disqualify them from any future contests in case anyone was worrying about that aspect of it.

^^

Cool.

However, what's holding me back is some technical stuff.

I don't want to release a character that isn't finished, but on top of that, I may have some different plans for him.


I have quite a few, so I may post one this week, though.

I have one, but she's not even remotely done. I need to do some brain storming.

this is going to be a rough draft of one of the characters i had in mind.

name - bio
height - 5 feet, 6inches
weight - 300 pounds
origin - outworld
allignment - evil
allies - skarlet
rivals - shang tsung,quan chi,and shao kahn.

bio - he was created from an experiment that went wrong in the flesh pits that involved injecting a acidic substance directly into a merc. it had nice results but it was unstable he broke out of the flesh pits and swore revenge for creating such an a abomination.

fighting style - he is a shape shifter combining various projectiles and has various forms to make his playstyle feel different each time you play him.

colors - attire 1 is green,attire 2 is yellow,attire 3 black.

form 1 - he's dark green all over his body. black eyes. he's naked but you dont see anything because he's liquid. has horn coming out of his head. spikes cover his entre body.

form 2 - he's yellow green all over his body. black eyes. he's naked but you don't see anything because he's made out of liquid. no horns,no spikes but has wings.

form 3 - he's black and glows yellow green all over his body. eyes are yellow. he's naked but you don't see anything because he's made out of liquid. he has no wings,no horns,no spikes but he does have a tail. his left hand is in the form of a claw.

special moves for form 1.

horns extend - the horns extend out and jab into the opponnet.

spikes projectle - spikes shoot out of his body like a porcupine.

foot whip and trip - his foot turns curvy like a whip to trip up his opponnet.

acid ball - shoots out a fast projectle of acid shaped as a ball that hits and burns the opponnet.

special moves for form 2.

wing slam - slams the fighter down with his wings.

fly - self explantory.

head expand - head and neck strech out to perform a head butt from full screen.

liquid teleport - form into a puddle and appears on the opposite side.

special moves for form 3.

tail extend/spin flip kick - he peforms several flipkicks in midair while juggling the fighter he spins his tail hitting the fighter while flip kicking him at the same time causing more hits.

claw crab and toss - he extends his hand out from full screen and grabs them with the claw and tosses them on the opposite side of the screen.

puddle slip - he shoots out a puddle to stun the opponnet fo a free hit.

sickle spin kick - he form his leg in the form of a sickle and slices them with a spin kick.

xray - runs at the enemy and knees them in the face. you see his knee expand out as a spike and fracture there jaw. then he forms his fingers as spikes and impales the enemy in the eyes. then kicks the opponnet away with a green mist effect.

fatality 1 - jumps into the the enemys mouth and expands blowing them up from the insides. leaving guts,blood,bones,skin everywhere.

fatality 2 - he spits a substance out on the fighters face melting there face off while nibbling it at the same time. little balls of acid that have teeth chomp away.

entance - he forms out of thin air and says welcome!

taunt - forms his hand into a giant hand and says bring it.

victory pose - he spits on the camera cracking it.

ending -after defeating shang,kahn,and quan i asked skarlet if she wanted to rule outworld with me. she said yes and understood that she was an experiment to. we will eventally merge the realms and not even thre eldar gods can stop us.

this was a rough draft. i'll most likely not enter this character in the next tournament because i have dozens more. please give feedback. i'll try to give feedback on the characters posted in this topic.

@acidslayer- I really like that your character is a product of the Flesh Pits. They were horrendously underutilized in the game. He's definitely got a good connection to the setting, but I'm not really sure Skarlett would be so willing to become his queen after he kills Shao Kahn. She's really one of the only people who actually seems LOYAL to Kahn. But that's really just a minor gripe, since arcade endings are not usually canon. My main concern is with the whole multiple forms thing. Is there a special move to change forms? I had a similar gripe with some other characters in the tournament, but it's really nothing character-breaking to me.

All-in-all, good character.

Sanguinius thanks for the feedback on my character bio. i have a bunch more characters in my mind and each one is very different. so here is my feed back on your character blitz. the feedback is good and bad. not hating on your character just giving my opinion. it's not as detailed as the feedback you had given me but here it is.

blitz - interesting fighting style. enjoyed the blade dance special. to much use of the whip swords. decent attires. it would of been better if he had not remembered his memories.

hope you enjoyed. i'll most likely post another one of my characters later. please give feedback on my character bio anyone and everyone.

Thanks for the feedback, and don't feel bad about not having very detailed feedback. As long as we agree neither of us can review with the skill of Mojo6. I'm thinking of throwing a couple more up, too.

And here's another one. I know he's a pallet-swap.

Character name: Avarice
Gender: Male
Age: 19,000 years
Height: 6'3"
Weight: 236 lbs
Origin: Edenia
Alignment: Good

Character bio: Ten thousand years ago, Karak was the greatest warrior Edenia had ever produced. He was unbeatable, they said. Karak was to be Edenia's ace in the hole during their conflict with Outworld. He'd fought his way all the way to the top of the Mortal Kombat tournament. However, on the eve of final kombat, a mysterious albino approached him. This man, calling himself Quan Chi, offered young Karak a vision of his possible future. If he were to forfeit his match, he would be made a general in the Emperor's armies and given a palace of gold, filled with riches. His friends and family would be spared, and he could keep his land as a pure, unspoiled reminder of Edenia. How could he decline the chance to preserve a part of his homeland and to be made its new ruler? The following day, there were riots. The fabled savior of the realm, Edenia's last hope, was standing beside it's would-be conqueror. Karak conceded, offering his fealty to Kahn in exchange for what he'd been shown in Quan Chi's vision. Outworld's emperor scoffed at this and cast him from his sight. Karak then tried to appeal to King Jerrod, to aid in some sort of rebellion. Anything. There was a familiar presence there, though. Somehow the Edenian king had been made aware of the reason for Karak's betrayal of his homerealm. A bald, grim-faced, ashen man strode out from the shadows. Jerrod asked that this man, the one who'd told him everything of Karak's betrayal, dispense an appropriate punishment. Despite his pleas for forgiveness and his accusations that Quan Chi, the man standing with Jerrod now, was the one who'd convinced him to concede, the king would her nothing of it. Karak's hands and arms were turned to molten gold, and though he now had all the riches he would ever need, he could never hold anything again. Jerrod's final act before the forces of Outworld was to cast the proud young warrior from the realm. Karak found himself traveling aimlessly between the realms, now under the assumed monicker of Avarice, seeking some kind of penance. He'd spent this time acclimating himself to the new state in which he'd found his hands, training to use them as a weapon so that he could, if he ever found a way, make up for his past misdeeds. This quest seemed futile until he chanced upon another world under threat of invasion from Outworld. This place, Earthrealm, had itself a champion in a man called the Great Kugn Lao. Karak, though, was disappointed to see this powerful warrior killed by the four-armed Shokan prince, Goro. Karak saw that the man had been fatigued, weakened by the fights leading up to the showdown with the champion of Outworld. An idea formed in Avarice's mind. He'd help this young realm by using the same tactic he'd used to doom his home realm. He'd take part in subsequent tournaments, eliminating as many of Outworld's representatives as he could before throwing the fight to Earthrealm's champion. So far this hasn't worked as there have been none of the quality of the Great Kung Lao, but now, at the dawn of the tenth tournament, this Liu Kang appears to be Earthrealm's last great hope.

Fighting style: Slow and powerful, Avarice has developed a very defensive fighting style. Avarice's combos are based more on punches than kicks, and they are not long chains, but short powerful combinations.

Special moves:

Molten Punch: Leaps into the air and brings his fist down on the opponent's shoulder.

Molten Krush:(Enhanced Molten Punch) Uses both fists to crash down upon the opponent.

Golden Lance: Throws a rapidly cooling blob of molten gold at the opponent, it solidifies into a spear-like projectile.

Gilt Harpoon:(Enhanced Golden Lance) Remains attached to his arm and he pulls the enemy in to his extended fist.

Shining Shackles: Throws a bola of molten gold at his opponent's ankles, tripping them up and stunning them for a couple seconds.

Burning Restraint:(Enhance Shining Shackles) Throws a glod of molten gold at the opponent's chest, dropping them on their back, pinning them down and burning them.

Burning Grip: Grabs the opponent's chest, searing them with his hands.
Gold Medal:(Enhanced Burning Grip)Grabs the opponent's chest, burning them with his molten gold, then kicks them away, violently.

Fool's Gold: Creates a shield of molten gold in front of him. If an enemy hits the shield with a melee attack, they become trapped.

Ka-Ching:(Enhanced Fool's Gold)After the opponent becomes trapped in the gold shield, Avarice slams it into their face.

X-ray attack: For the Ferryman: Grab. Takes the opponent by the back of the head and smashes their face into the ground, shattering the front of their skull. Lifts the opponent by the neck and brings them close, face to face. Punches their sternum, cracking it. Drops the opponent, produces a gold koin on each thumb and jams them into their eyes.

Round entrance taunt: Walks on screen flicking his thumb up, producing a dragon koin and flipping it with each flick. Looks up at opponent and takes on his fighting stance saying, "Now to show you the gold standard."

Mid-match taunt: Cracks his knuckles and says, "Keep that up and you'll never win." If too close, he jumps backward and produces a stream of gold to slow his landing.

End-match taunt: Flicks a couple coins at the down opponent, saying,"Take these and try buying some talent," and walks away.

Fatalities:

All Choked Up: Grabs the opponent by the throat, and shoves his hands into their mouths. The opponent stumbles back, clutching their neck and gasping for air as some liquid gold dribbles out of the corners of their mouths, before falling to the ground dead.

Death Mask: Grabs the opponent's arm, coating it in quickly cooling gold and rips it off. He uses their own golden hand to stab them in the chest then grabs their grimacing face, coating it in gold.

Character appearance: Powerfully built, with fair skin green eyes and long black hair, Avarice wears no shirt, but has a harness of black leather in a cross on his chest with orange pauldrons and his arms appear to be made of flowing, but shaped, molten gold. He wears simple black pants and shoes with orange shinguards. Wears an orange ninja mask over the lower part of his face

Alternate costume: Bald with a ragged looking suit of gold armor, made from the gold that emanates from his hands. Looser hanging orange veil on his face.

Klassic costume: Orange pallet swapped MK2 ninja.

Character ending: Everything had gone wrong. Liu Kang was defeated and Avarice had moved on. The fight with Goro was long, hard-fought, and utterly pointless. Avarice encased the monstrous prince within gold and was, to his chagrin, declared the victor. The merger of the two realms meant doom for those who inhabited Earthrealm and Avarice was forced from yet another home, as the curse preventing him from returning to Edenia had spread to all realms within Outworld. Have a nice day.

This character is very much incomplete, didnt really finish either his story ending or image but maybe next time.
Name: Infested
Orgin: Eart Realm
Race: Once human but now a demon
Alignment: Good
Bio: Infested was one a great warror from earth who once helped defend his realme in one of the earlier tournaments, worried of his skills Shao Khan secretly sent for him to be killed. Infested was confronted, unable to fight against the hoards he fled through a portal to the wastelands of Netherealm. Infested would not live very long in this climate and would surley die.Days past and it seemed his fate was set untill the necromancer Shinnok came across hes lifeless body and rescued him, he made a proposition he would give Infested eternal life and great power and one day the opportunity to return to the earth realm, all he had to do was to join Shinnok and help him overthrow Shao Khan. With no other choice he agreed, unfortunately this also came with a heavy price to obtain this power Infested would play host to a number of parasites which turnd him into a full demon.
Special moves:
Entrapment: Infested pulls open hes chest and one of the parasites leaps out and coils around his oponent allowing a free hit
Parasite bite: a parasite leaps from hes chest and bites the openent
Leach: grabs his openent and leaches in his hands feed on his or hers blood and replenishes a little of Infesteds health
Hunger rush: parasite partly burst from Infesteds chest, slides (pulling infested with it)towards the openent sending them flying
Fatalitey 1: Both large parasites are released from Infested chest they then each bite the oponents feet and head, they then proceed to viscously fight over the body untill its torn in half, they then contiue to eat the remaines
Fatality 2: Infested tears his mouth open to vomit a large amount of leaches which feast upon the openent sucking the blood from his/her body leaving an empty dry husk

here's my feedback.

avarice - bio is a bit long. ok fighting style. to much use of gold. mid match taunt is alright. decent attires. sweet fatality 2.

infested - i like that shinnok rescued him. enjoyed hunger rush special. cool fatality 2. to much use of leeches. i actually like infested more than i do malice. that's quite impressive. great artwork. hope you finish this character because it has loads of potential.

here's another one of my characters i had in mind of using but chose not to.

name - cyber
weight - 20,000 pounds.
height - 50 feet
origin - earthrealm
allies - sektor,cyrax,cyborg smoke
enemy's - jax,sonya and the special forces.
allignment - evil

fighting style - use of weapons and various technologies. slow but can dash very fast. learns the the techniques of characters and adjusts his play accordingly.

primary attire - head,arms,legs are silver. his chest is baby blue. eyes glow bright red. has a jetpack on his back. bolts are everywhere along with wires hanging out.

secondary attire - he looks more like the exo skelton from t2 but is 50 feet tall. eyes glow purple. head,arms,legs are gold. has a jetpack. half of his face is missing.

bio - cyber was created by the special forces. there was an accident. he malfuntioned and reprgrammed himself to protect all cyborgs and to eliminate jax and sonya for creating a weapon to be used in wars and other misuses of his funtions.

entrance - he dashes onto the screen by using his wheels on his feet. similar to rollerblades.

mid match taunt - you must be terminated and chukkles in a robotic voice.

victory pose - throws down a bomb at the opponet laying on the ground. they fly up then hit the ground. he says puny human.

ending - i can't kill for what is right. raiden shocks him powering him down. the special forces then reprogram him to defeat shinnok when the times come. ownly to awaken in the next tournament.

special moves

cyber punch/cyber kick/cyber headbutt - launches his arm to deliver a punch. launches his leg to deliver a kick. launches his head delivering a headbutt.

mace smash - a compartment opens and he uses his mace to bash his opponnet.

axe spin - a compartment opens and he gets an axe. he spins in a circle cutting anything that comes into contact.

laser beam - shoots beams from his eyes.

gattling gun - a gattling gun opens up on his shoulder to open up fire.

rpg deploy - a rpg opens up on his opposite shoulder than fires a rocket.

xray - plants a mine blowing them sky high. flys up knees them in the jaw, then uses a hammer to bonk them on the head bringing them back down to the ground.

fatality 1 - wires expand out gripping the opponet. shocking them to death. skin melting bones frying leaving only a pile of blood and bones.

fatality 2 - 100 spider bots deploy sawing,slicing,piercing,shooting,exploding the opponet to death leaving only a pile of guts and a puddle of blood.

hope you enjoyed please give feedback.

This was my version of Malice when she was Matthius, I changed her to female as I wanted to add the scorned jealous lover plot which I couldnt do with Matthius plus I just thought MK could use another female.
You can also get a feel for how Malices Tortured mind stance would look

here are my ratings for the characters so far. i'm not hating just giving my honest scores of the characters in terms,of moves,story,etc.

avarice 5/10

bio ?/10 i don't rate my characters but i'd like for some users to rate my character from 1-10.

blitz 6/10

cyber ?/10 i don't rate my characters but i'd like for some users to rate my character from 1-10.

infested 8/10

hope you enjoyed. i'l most likely do another character eventually. please give feedback on my characters bio and cyber. also please rate my characters from 1-10. thanks. give honest feedback and honest scores.

I will try to read over all of these and provide feedback on them all as well. I need to get either Jaya or Cameron uploaded soon. This thread needs more visibility as I almost forgot about it.

here's another character i had in my mind.

name - rift
height - 5 feet, 5 inches.
weight - 150 pounds
allignment - neutral
foes - eldar gods,kahn,onaga,shinnok,quan chi,and shang tsung.
allies - scorpion and sub - zero
gender - female
realm - earthrealm

entrance - she falls from the sky falling through the arena and pops right back up through the arena.

mid match taunt - she flicks some dust from under her fingernails that knock the opponnet down onto there ass.

victory pose - she winks at the camera cracking the screen.

primary attire - she has long brown hair,pink lipstck,blue eyes,puple tainktop,black bikerboots,short pink skirt, and carries a golden staff with a purple sphere on the top.

secondary attire - she has long black hair,red lipstick,white eyes,black baggy pants,a purple hoodie with lime green flames on the back of it. she carries a golden staff with a lime green sphere on the top.

special moves

portal projectile - she shoots out a portal at the enemy which launches them on the opposite side of the screen.

portal drop - she creates a portal over the head of the opponnet which lifts the opponnet and drops them to the ground.

staff spin - she spins in a circle holding her staff hitting anything that comes into contact.

staff throw - she throws her staff with the pointy tip.

staff slam - she slams her staff into the ground creating a shockwave effect.

xray - she sweeps the opponet onto the floor. she creates a portal above and throws her staff into it. the staff goes through the the portal and lands on the opponets head causing a shockwave effect through there entire body.

fatality 1 - she creates a soulnado underneathe the opponnet. the souls rip apart the enemy.

fatality 2 - she blows a kiss at the fighter. it is in the form of a portal that looks like lips. the portal sucks at the fighter causing the opponnet to turn inside out. the skeleton is on the outside and the eyes,tongue,nose,ears,lips,flesh,guts and etc are in the inside of the skeleton.

bio - she was created by the gods long ago before there were even eldar gods. she one day would be the successor to raiden, and fujin. she looks like a teenager but is thousands of years old. she does look average but don't let that fool you. she can manipulate the particels in the air to create various portals in all different shapes and sizes. she could of stopped raiden but she was following her orders by the gods.

ending - after what happend with the events of mka she became the new protector of earthrealm. she would train the remaining surviors of earthrealm and help with the new warriors to come.

hope you enjoyed. please give feedback,rate,and review my characters.

rift ?/10 i don't rate my character. so please rate this character among my other characters to. maybe i'll post another character once i start getting more feedback from you guys and girls.

@Acidslayer: All right, I think I've got some numbered feedback for ya.

Bio:6/10-His backstory just felt underdeveloped, and as I'd said before, not a fan of the inclusion of Skarlet in the ending. The whole goo monster thing, while somewhat refreshing, just doesn't feel Mortal Kombat to me. Again, really not a fan of characters in fighting games with multiple "forms" A seamless shift while performing different moves/attacks would have been better, in my opinion.

Cyber:3/10-Backstory feels a little weak again, especially since it indicates that he's actually good/has good intentions, but you wrote his alignment as "evil". A fifty foot tall robot feels so not MK that it hurts, and the simple logistics of putting them in the game/fighting against them would be a nightmare. His moves feel a little all over the place, but his fatalities are pretty wicked.

Rift:2/10-"Created by the gods before there were Elder Gods". I don't really know how that would be possible. Backstory seems to be missing a bit of info that would help a lot. Why are the Elder Gods her foes? Why is she allied with Scorpion and Sub-Zero? The portal abilities are cool, but I have to hate you because I was working on a character with a similar powerset lol. I simply can't stand that this replacement god dresses like a Hot Topic kid. Creating a soulnado as a fatality is kind of cool, but less "Fatality" and more "Genocide" as the sheer number of people who would have to be sacrificed to do such a thing.

Hope these help, and know that, if they seem harsh, that wasn't my intention. Just trying to offer some criticism that'll help.

thanks for the feedback. i have lots of characters i had in mind for this tournament but i wanted to gain some sucess with the release of kenshi being dlc so i chose to use my character kevshi. it didn't work out so well. i wanted each character i create to feel and play different from another.

this way kevshi does look quite different than bio,cyber,rift and my other characters i had in my mind.

i appreciate the feedback and i don't think your being harsh at all. i was never good with coming up with stories anyways so i focus more on looks and moves.

who knows i might just put up another character eventually.