Thanks to all of you that voted for the burning rebelion Ekimaru ;d It means alot and also my salutes to NoobSaibot000 for putting up a good fight!

Now I am off to cast my vote for the second rounds

I'm taking my time more with the votes now...

Expect long posts in the feedback thread.

As for my voting reveiws here it goes...

Match one. I picked Khaali. It was not easy though because I really did not want another Shokan. Luna had a few things going for her. Her wolf moves were what I liked best(especially the second fatality) and I thought Nightwolf should have been given these in past games. However I did not like the bio. I can't see Raiden attempting to create mortals, I don't like how Luna showed up out of nowhere, and the story just didnt catch my attention. The ending had a nice touch to it when Nightwolf entered her body and her name changed to Eclipse. That was cool.
As for Khaali I mentioned I did not want a fourth Shokan. But her story and spider fighting style were enough to take the win. Her moves although hard to imagine in game seemed very unique. No copy and paste to 'em. For a gal she was BRUTAL and SCARY. And come on... She looked pretty good naked. Nude and in spider position always gets the pervert vote. lol

Match 2. Although I have a very hard time imagining Erebus' move in an actual game he still got my vote. Although I shook my head at him being "The most powerful necromancer in Outworld" his story was decent. Not amazing but it held my interest. Overall Erebus seemed more MKish than Ekimaru. Ekimaru is not a bad character at all but his special moves weren't very inspiring. His first fatality reminded me of Smoke's fatality. I did however love your second fatality. Very nice and gory. It seems like you went very traditional on the asian aspect of your charaters story. But it just wasn't enough. He did look cool though. I'll give you that. Good luck to him in round two.

Match 3. No offence but Terra is outta Malcoms league. Terra got my vote. Traditional by almost all measures which is not a bad thing. She also had great earth powers. I dislike bringing more God type characters in but this was a goddess. As for Malcolm... he was too basic. His story was too much like Kabal and Sonya. There were a couple of positives though such as the second fatality, the flashbang grenades, and his victory pose where Sonya is involved. Not enough though and Terra gets the win. Ill do round two later.

Thanks for the feedback but I don't agree that his first fatality is the same as smoke’s, of course I respect your opinion :d nonetheless. I can see where you are getting the vibe but the concept is quite different only the final part of it seems similar to me. I wanted to implement the arrogance of Ekimaru in it. Also a lot of you guys found the story incomplete and not fully explained is because I intended to write his bio the Mk2011 way, and I originally planned to have Story mode interactions getting deeper into his persona and putting him in the MK environment. I think a character should have:

-A well thought out standalone story that reveals his character development establishing his originality

-interactions with the other MK characters at some point (in my case these are brief because, as stated before, I originally intended story mode interactions)

*- ALOT of physical appeal (call me shallow if you must but I think you will agree that a big part of "maining" a character is his looks and overall design)

*- Of course gameplay (which I tried to balance the best way I could)

(the stars being the most important)

Lonin Regon

Story

A pretty short character that reminds me a bit of Kobra, without any connection to any known characters. A street wise fighter type character isn't bad as a concept, but it needs a lot more to be truly good. "Looking to prove myself in battle" is another somewhat overused concept, and while it doesn't have to be bad, it is if that's the entire focal point. The watch thing is the lone portion of the story that sets him apart, but you failed to elaborate on it at all. It might help your character to elaborate more on that and make it a centerpiece to build upon.

The ending is an issue for me, because I feel it's an improper use of Raiden. Raiden acting bizarrely is still not okay by me, despite his ridiculousness in MK9. It's completely out of character for a character who supposedly possesses so much wisdom to hand the title "protector of Earthrealm" to a guy who happens to be a good fighter and nothing more. It takes more than strength to be fill that role; it takes courage, wisdom, compassion and many other traits to watch over an entire realm. While you do bring your story full circle by noting Lonin will now have endless threats to test himself against, the fact that I still don't like that angle exists. I would suggest trying to make Lonin more involved in the storyline and intertwine him to another character, group, event or location already present in the canon.

Gameplay

The use of the watch is something I was expecting, but without any real story about the watch I'm left wondering just what powers he has access to. It can fire lasers, turn him invisible and create illusions? Seems a little random and overpowered, since he then has access to a large number of specials (theoretically).

Brawler Mode is nice however and fits well with your character. I would suggest more moves such as this added and an elaboration on the watch, refining the number of things it can do. Making it too powerful makes it uninteresting, at least for me.

Your X-Ray is pretty well done, though it would need a good separation hit. At the present both characters would remain on the ground, opponent pinned under him. I'd have him use a spear takedown but then stand up, doing a second bone breaking maneuver. Perhaps this is your vision, but if it is I do not read it that way. The first fatality is fine, up until the decapitation. As a brawler, I don't think it fits. Breaking the neck would, however. I like the idea of laser tag very much, again it's the ending portion that makes me think twice. I don't like overkill fatalities, especially ones that are performed on what would already be corpses. Ripping the heart out is an unnecessary movement.

Appearance

A typical look for this sort of character, leaving me not much to say about it. Some sort of identifying trait would go a long way in helping here, something that screams "this is Lonin Regon, remember him". His poses are well done, apart from the victory one which I dislike because I don't like any incognito fatalities embedded in the victory pose. The match is over, the opponent is not dead; attempting to kill them without using a proper fatality isn't something I'd ever advise. Fatalities should be fatalities; victory poses should be victory poses.

3 Major Suggestions

-Set your character apart from the norm. Make sure he feels like he is a Mortal Kombat character by connecting him to the universe; if not, you run the risk of having him as a character who could be in any game with a few lines changed.

-Elaborate on the watch. Where is it from? Where did he obtain it? What are the exact powers it has?

-Don't overdo it. Specials and fatalities are at their best when they are simple maneuvers that have no unnecessary additions tacked on the end.

Thank-you very much everyone for Khaali's reception, I feel quite honoured. Lets see how far a psychotic naked warrior woman can go eh?

The voting topic is now stickied for the duration of the tournament. Please don't ignore the stickies!

If I may ask my good sir, when you have the time I'd like to hear your thoughts on Deon, you seem to give honest and well thoughtout opinions and I'd like to hear your thoughts, both positive and negative about my creation, cheers

Best Costume by far. It's what Mileena's third alt should have been.

Hopefully people will pay attention to the sticky. I trust that they will.

Just posting another reminder here in case people still don't know round 2 has started. Topic is stickied; topic will remain the same and be updated daily. No daily new topic as that would create forum clutter.

~post to keep the thread in the first page~

Kind of concerned with the voter dropoff today. Any thoughts?

I think people tend to forget about stickied threads which is kind of ironic. I'll be back later to vote once I've had a good look at the entries.

I think the voting is going to rise and fall quite a bit, especially as it gets closer to the middle.

What time does the voting end again?

I've tried to mention I stickied within in this topic multiple times. I basically only did so because the forum has been moving at a steady rate due to Skarlet. If the turnout is still low when it closes later tonight, I may remove the sticky and see how that goes.

It's quite disheartening really when you think about how many people enterd compared to how many are voting :( not to mention all the hard work Crow put in as well as the entrents.

I think it's the same on any forum really. I'm an admin on another forum and I've come to learn that if I sticky a thread it quickly dies.

I've dropped it back down to see if it helps any.

Psionic

Story

I'll begin by stating this: I don't know if MK has room for three psychic centric characters. Unfortunately, you didn't really elaborate much on this Psionic-Force, but stating it is older than the Elder Gods is a bit of a problem. Personally, I saw potential in connecting this character to the One Being and perhaps making that what he is actually an avatar of. There's nothing to do with psychic powers there, but it could probably be built around and it's already established in the lore as existing. The convenience of this character knowing what Raiden knows a little too, well, convenient. I generally frown on omnipotent characters as they are presented as far too knowledgeable and powerful.

"Psychic ninja" is another problem; that's Ermac. If there ever were three psychically based characters the third most certainly could not belong to an order of ninja in order to maintain his individuality. What about this Order of the Psi? I think that would have to be elaborated on much more. Ending is a bit of a ho hum "corrupted god-like character destroys everything" plotline that's not really interesting.

Gameplay

Firstly, you have to detail your specials. Another glaring issue is that you borrowed moves from Ermac and Kenshi, which again cannot happen if you're wanting to use a psychic character. Abilities must be unique, especially among characters with similar powers. The fighting style leaves me at a bit of a loss; it will have to be more descriptive as how a character does battle represents a large portion of their overall character.

The fatalities aren't great. Using telepathy is fine and dandy but the fatality description should be more detailed. The first fatality doesn't make a lot of sense, as if such a thing happened to a living being, it would not be reduced to dust. Reducing them to a pile of flesh or blood would be possible, but characters aren't made of dirt (well... most).

Appearance

Again, you simply have to get rid of the ninja look. The main costume looks like it could be any random ninja and the alt is still using a ninja mask. I personally feel the time for creating any new ninja (ones that look like MK ninjas do) has passed. Simply because all colors haven't been exhausted is no reason to revisit painful memories of MK Trilogy.

The character quotes aren't too bad. I'm most fond of his entrance; the phrase you use there is quite good. I'm not completely against such a character, but there are too many intangibles in the rest of this character's profile for me to want this character existing in the canon.

3 Major Suggestions

-Rethink your character's appearance. Another typical MK standard ninja from MKT is simply not going to appeal to most anyone. Make him original.

-Don't borrow specials from other characters of similar powers. Again, make him original and distance yourself from Kenshi and Ermac.

-Elaborate more on his origins and make him less powerful generally. Overly powerful characters, especially ones "older than the gods" are typically not great. What is the Order of the Psi? Be thorough and believable in your presentation.

Krimson's X-Ray and Second Fatality should've been detailed better.

That will be a problem in judging I sense.. [Along with her specials]

Good luck cyberelmo!

Another random tidbit about Krimson: The thing around her neck in her primary costume was originally dog tags.

So we've commited to a 31 day tournament with large gaps of time between when our own kharacters get a chance to shine. To fill those gaps I am going to choose a few 'Champions' for myself; basically other entries that I like that are in other brackets or on other days.

I will cheer for these champions and they will entertain me!

Now to actually pick out some...

I cant tell you how much i'm enjoying this contest.
Only have to wait till sunday for my match up and i'm really nervous, my opponent is a strong one!

I already have trhee, sadly one is the charachter i'm facing on the first round ... :S

I've got several champions of my own, but no order in which I prefer them, because I'm not that good at making up my mind about such things. XD Only 13 days until my matchup.