And that character will go down in history as the 6th greatest champion of Mortal Kombat....On MKO, anyway. XD T'will be a glorius day.

Yeah this is going to be so cool!!! Everyone really has done an awesome job especially Crow! Love your character Spider804, it's going to be an awesome match against my little Limbo. He has an awesome fatality, it would be an honor if Limbo got to see it

It is not like the winner is getting a game spot so it is not a big deal. I would rather get the boot first than go all that way and not win. If I did make it that far I would be a bit more discouraged with a loss. Besides,once I saw the amount of contestants were being raised I kinda lost hope of a chance at winning anyway.

Indeed, a God of Gravity versus the most powerful of Shang Tsung's Shadow Priests does seem fitting for the final fight of any round.
Are you referring to Marek's second fatality, by any chance?

That is your right to disagree. It still changes not how I see it. It has mostly to do with the shoulder joints of all the arms. They do not allow the arms to give the right amount of stride like a spider. They would move much more like a large lizard if anything. Which is still really fast but not as graceful as ShesGotClaws is trying to portray. I just think her awesome idea was poorly presented because maybe she rushed putting Khaali together.
Its not a big deal though...I am just trying to state if I did vote I saw more flaws in her character than mine is all. And damn it you mentioned cup cakes! lol I have blood sugar issues and can't have em' and I now want one (sad puppy face here).

You may find this hard to believe, but the sole purpose of my nonsense(comparing spider shokan to cupcakes) is to, in fact, make those who cannot eat cupcakes want them. True story.

You know if that is true than that would make you mean and a bully. Hopefully you are being sarcastic otherwise I will stop talking to you. That is putting it nice...I am just stating my opinion. It is not even your character...

Come to think of it...I have a random question for Crow.

@Crow...Is there any viable way to prove everyone's identities so that there is not people having more than 1 contestant?

So when you win a round do you draw a picture of your character finishing off your opponent? Because that would be awesome.

Karundi's fatalities would be fun to draw.

I think almost any fatality would be fun to draw...even if it was just a stick figure drawing lol.

Sure, same as is done with verifying if one account is the same as another. Quite easily done on my end.

I think you should reread the way Harle wrote that, it seems pretty clear to me that it was sarcasm, but yeah just my two cents.

Alright,so if I went to a friends house on a totally different PC and started another account...you would be able to know?

Drawing the fatality is an awesome Idea! But I am not sure if the other participant will be ok with it. Seems a bit degrading, but heck this is what Mortal Kombat is all about

Well that is what I was hoping but I was waiting for her to say so. It is hard to tell these days with people on MKO lol....for all I know she could have been hitting on me.

My character would still look good laying in pools of blood Damn it I double posted again. Sorry...trying to carry on and talk to many people at once is not my thing lol.

Hmmm... This happens so very often. Here I thought I was being silly and light hearted, and somehow it comes across as malicious... Truth was, I was totally hitting on you.

No, I joke....

Nothing I say is mean spirited in any way, but cold hard text can come across that way I suppose. Also, this is probably the tenth baking metaphor I've used on here in the last few days, I was not directing my moist and delicious wrath upon you personally.

You know another thing that happens extremely often? I am referred to as a she in real life and on the internet on a regular basis, when in fact, I am male. Granted, I have exceptionally pretty hair, but still.... My face is hairy.............. But your mistake is perfectly justifiable considering my female avatar, female character, and screen named derived from the word "Harlet", so I'll forgive it.

And I defended someone else's character because your critique was straight up nitpicky, it bothered me that someone could be judging these characters on something that specific(it also pisses me off when someone tries to use bio length as a negative... ). If someone were to say Annette would have a difficult time using both a whip and a rapier, I'd roll my eyes and say "tough titties", she's till gonna do it. I also defended Adsler when someone brought up a comparison to Voldo as a negative, I'm just going to defend a character that I enjoy, simple as that.

And while I am not entirely sure what you were insinuating with that "identity check" comment, I am not the creator of that character, and I'm kind of offended now. You've come off as mean while acting as though I was bullying you.... As a matter of fact, I'm so mad I could spit.

Again, I joke, you should try to be a little more easy going... As they say, "point your heels to Jesus and think of handbags."

My promised detail feedback will now begin for eliminated characters. My opinions are my own and do not express the opinions of Mortal Kombat Online (pointless disclaimer thing). I will not be scathing, simply honest and critical. I will always point out things you did well however, as well as put forth my thoughts on how to help you improve for the next contest.

First up will be the four that were eliminated in the preliminary round. I'll continue on from there.

Feedback:

Bachi Li

Story: There are several issues to address here. The backstory with Bachi Li and his father is merely touched upon and doesn't enthrall me. There's simply not enough depth here; it should be elaborated upon. Why did he kill him? What is the significance of the murder and how is it tied with the rest of his biography? The Elder Gods randomly calling up this person (after he wandered around as a soul aimlessly for a while) doesn't make a ton of sense to me. You must connect one point to another. The transition from one event to another in a story should be seamless in that it makes sense to the reader.

Why Orderrealm? There should be a connection to the realm itself, but I can see none. What exactly is the purpose of being a color guardian, and why are there only six? It leaves me thinking you are portraying these color gods as protectors of their realm, but this creates a plothole since Raiden is the God of Thunder and protector of Earthrealm. The number six alludes to the six realms, but with nothing mentioned about the point of these color gods or any reference to the other color gods I'm at a loss. How Bachi Li goes from color god in Orderrealm to Earthrealm hero is rather baffling and feels forced for the sake of making him an important character.

The ending is quite disappointing because I feel Quan Chi is crammed in for no apparent reason. Quan Chi tricking people is getting rather old and the current game storyline already places far too much focus on his dealings. To add one more is overkill; this is virtually Scorpion's story slightly altered. You lose me around the "Wraith" part because you offer no explanation of this "beast". I can't really tell what is going on without more backstory.

Gameplay:

Some ideas you have are nice, particularly summoning the purple weapons. I'm not sure I understand how some of the moves work (chest kick that lands you on your face) and YRR and GTS seem like they're too long to be special moves. The X-Ray is probably the highlight of your moveset as I can actually visualize it. A small note on your fighting style; you describe Aikido as a martial art designed to bruise but not injure them, but then go on to say Bachi has refined it to be more bloody? It makes sense to me a god would not want to injure his opponents if they are benevolent, but one phrase seems to contradict the other.

The fatalities are honestly not very well done. The first deals with more body slicing, which I suppose is passable as I really don't weight fatalities very much in my judging. But the part where he randomly stabs them in the eye is bothering, since it's unnecessary movement. The second fatality again makes mention of this "beast" that you failed to address in the biography. Feels like Mortal Kombat 3 nonsense fatality, respectfully. I don't care for bizarre finishers with no basis in the character they are representing.

Appearance:

Appearance wise he was always going to be compared to Rain due to the color purple. His main costume is interesting enough, and though some people frown on "anime" based hair colorings I do not. However, his alt doesn't sound like it would be something I would enjoy as it would be far too close to being a ninja, which we have plenty of and already one of that particular color. I'm again confused by your "beast", as this time it's failed to be mentioned at all, and I would think it would have made a more sensible alternate than a ninja knockoff. Of course, I still would need the beast to be referenced in the biography if you were to do this. I can't really figure out the meaning of mentioning Armageddon, SC3 and SC4 in this section... but anyway.

3 major suggestions:

-Read over your biography and ending and ask yourself if you've covered all the details. When presenting a created character, it is important to leave your readers with as few questions as possible.

-Work on creating your own combat style rather that adopting from a style that seems to be unfitting to the character. Be sure your specials are to the point and don't seem like combos.

-Avoid the ninja stereotype.

My question to Crow was just random and not insinuating anything to you. Just to get that out of the way.
I really don't see myself as being nit picky at all. I am just pointing out a potential technical flaw. After all I did praise Khaali and I do like the character. As a matter of fact I was even honorable not to vote for myself against her. I have no Idea why you are being defensive for my statement of opinion.
Now if I wanted to be offensive I would have been...and yes I did mistake you for a girl sorry...the avatar and sig kinda reflect femininity. My bad there...and I am usually easy going and cool. Well,unless you push buttons.
Back to Khaali though...I never mentioned the length of the bio or even much else for that matter. I pointed out the movement thing because it could potentially effect every move the character would make in an actual game. Than again to some extent you have a valid point that some things can be a bit exaggerated...it is Mortal Kombat. Like I said before...I think my opinion on characters may be too technical. To be honest,I could even rip apart my own character in such a form. Like the fact of the first fatality I described to look similar to the link posted with the sythe. Fact is if you look at the image of my character with the sythe...the handle is different than the one Louie uses in that video. This would mean that the motion of the slice is not accurate because the handle on Louie's sythe has grips and the one Luna holds has none.

when the fool and the wise man argue, who can tell em apart? lol.. not tryna stir anything up just saying...some of the bickering is pointless..cant get mad at someone having an opinion...its kinda like saying you have the BEST opinions of anyone. jus sayin...big tourney lots of khars to talk about..

Levyatan:

Story:

As interesting as new races typically are, there's a lack of depth here. Seems to be a little too mysterious. The race isn't given a name, just that it resides somewhere in Outworld. When introducing a new race to the mix, it's generally important to connect them to the in game world in some way. For example, Baraka is the leader of a savage race that work as grunts for Shao Kahn. Nitara was a vampire who had her home world absorbed into Outworld by Shao Kahn and sough to restore it, manipulating people along the way. The Shokan and Centaur are connected to one another and have a rivalry over who should be the elite guard of Outworld. It helps to establish a starting point for a character if you connect them to others in the game, or at least to a realm's history.

Beyond that, the story is a bit short and lacking detail. The idea of a disrespected hero from another race is rather interesting as a concept but it needs to be fleshed out much more to be truly dangerous in this competition. The ending is similarly lacking since there's a lot of formalities thrown around. Whenever there are NPCs in an ending, it's important we know who they are and more about them; such is the case of your character's kingdom.

Gameplay:

Mendax is fairly interesting and I like the idea of keeping the opponent guessing which is the real Levyatan. Infligo is similarly interesting in that it works like a reverse Spear, pulling himself towards the opponent rather than pulling the opponent towards him. None of your specials stand out as bad, but I feel the introduction of a couple of more original moves would have helped. The typical energy ball doesn't do very much for me, especially when the character's powers aren't really described well. While the X-Ray is fairly good (you should note that the kicks crack individual ribs, as that could be a pleasing sequence) I think the neck break at the end is too overkill.

The fatalities are subpar, in my opinion. The first seems elaborate enough, but I can't understand the point of the intestine wrapping. I can't figure out how that assists in blowing the limbs off of someone. The second fatality is fairly weak and deals with random teleportation powers, another of my various peeves.

Appearance:

Honestly, the first thing I thought of was this. Probably due to the new race, black and yellow parts of his appearance. There are elements of it I like, such as the elongated mask, but overall I'm not sure it's befitting. With your use of "king" in the bio and this being his most powerful warrior, I'm not sure he looks the part. Though I can't be sure, since the kingdom itself isn't described very well, I would have recommended something a little different than ninja pieces and parts.

3 Major Suggestions:

-Work your character into the MK mythology; don't make him a complete outsider without a single connection to anyone or anything in the game world.

-Elaborate on the details. Tell us more about his kingdom and who he is.

-Avoid recycling special powers such as energy balls and teleports

I understand the point you made but I was aching to be a smart a$$ to say that you can actually tell the two apart by looking for tells between them. An example, wise men would more than likely pause before speaking and the fools would more than likely jump to conclusions.
All I was trying to do is ask if he was being sarcastic or not because I could not tell. I was not trying to start anything. He even admit to being defensive when I was not even doing anything wrong lol. I did nothing wrong but if he wants to be mad and pissy at me that's cool.

@LycaniLLusion:

I just thought I'd be perfectly clear on my intent so we could avoid any more of these shenanigoats. My disagreeing with your opinion was not intended as a "you are wrong" statement. I said "I think... Blah blah blah" simply to add to the conversation from a different perspective. 'Tis all. But I'd prefer not to be referred to as "pissy" if it's all the same to you. Not once did I say anything of the sort, and I'd like to keep it that way.

Let us be done with this now, cupcake.

lol its cool. I was not literally saying you were pissy and I was just saying....well hell now see this is all just making me laugh now.
you said shenanigoats lol...that must be a new race because I never heard of it.
Seriously though,I understood what you meant Harle...I think between us both we confused people maybe lol. I dunno...its done though.

Indeed.

Also, I decided shenanigoats were better than shenanigans, because they just are... If that wasn't evident enough without my saying so. I'm hoping it doesn't catch on though like the recent comeback of "cool beans"... Because, frankly, it's just no fun that way.

Well once you say it...it will catch on sooner or later lol. In any case I am off to see the wizard. I have to get some food in me and than I may go online and kill people...not sure on if I want to play Black Ops or MK yet but there will be blood either way