BARAKAS PURPOSE. (I CANT SPELL good SO WHAT?!)
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posted12/20/2007 04:41 PM (UTC)by
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NOOBSAIBOT9
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11/20/2007 03:37 PM (UTC)
*Baraka was fighting with Scorpion* *Baraka stops and says "WHAT IS MY PURPOSE IN LIFE?!"* *Scorpion says "well you'r purpose is to kill me"* "I NEED A BETTER REASON WHY I SHOULD KILL YOU" baraka wailed. "WELL I-" a big bomb goes off where they were fighting. "OW WELL ANYWAY I WANT YOU TO KILL ME BEACUSE....WELL BEACUSE I JUST YOU KILL ME!!!" screamed Scorpion. "FINE I WIL-" A BIGGER BOMB GOES OFF!! they are not moving.......! i need feedback then i'll tell what happens next. NO FLAMING OR SWEARING OR SPAMMING.grin
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Sub-Frost055
11/27/2007 10:12 PM (UTC)
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what is this?
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NOOBSAIBOT9
11/27/2007 10:14 PM (UTC)
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a story.
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Sub-Frost055
11/27/2007 10:21 PM (UTC)
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it sucks and ease up on caps why don't ya?
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NOOBSAIBOT9
11/27/2007 10:24 PM (UTC)
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oh sorry.. i tryied didn't i?
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Sub-Frost055
11/27/2007 10:35 PM (UTC)
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NOOBSAIBOT9 Wrote:
*Baraka was fighting with Scorpion* *Baraka stops and says "WHAT IS MY PURPOSE IN LIFE?!"* *Scorpion says "well you'r purpose is to kill me"* "I NEED A BETTER REASON WHY I SHOULD KILL YOU" baraka wailed. "WELL I-" a big bomb goes off where they were fighting. "OW WELL ANYWAY I WANT YOU TO KILL ME BEACUSE....WELL BEACUSE I JUST YOU KILL ME!!!" screamed Scorpion. "FINE I WIL-" A BIGGER BOMB GOES OFF!! they are not moving.......! i need feedback then i'll tell what happens next. NO FLAMING OR SWEARING OR SPAMMING.grin


first off, stories would probably be sent to the submission threads, secondy, stories are suppose to have a beginning middle and end... i dont see anything. nobody would probably like this because there's no proper grammer, "Well becuase i just you kill me" surprisingly is not a sentence fragment but makes absoultely no sense there's no plot. and what the fuck is a bigger bomb? and you will probably get more comments about the caps. you need work... big time.
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XiahouDun84
11/27/2007 11:21 PM (UTC)
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Where and when are Baraka and Scorpion fighting? Why are they fighting? Why did Baraka suddenly, out of nowhere, start pondering the meaning of his life? He never really struck me as the existential type. Why does Scorpion believe Baraka's purpose is to kill him? Furthermore, why does Scorpion want Baraka to fulfill this purpose? And why are there bombs going off?

This really isn't a story...there's no context or sense to it. It's a random scene involving two characters with no prior relationship fighting for no reason and talking about nothing.
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ShaolinChuan
11/28/2007 01:19 AM (UTC)
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What the fuck is this bullshit? close this thread
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Sub-Frost055
11/28/2007 02:09 AM (UTC)
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not to mention, by the time you're 10 years old... you're supposed to know how to spell words...
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Darklord_Xel
11/28/2007 03:07 AM (UTC)
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This is the most epic story I have ever read...EVER.
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GrotesquetheBeast
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I need a new sig, something with Kabal from UMK3 would be sweet. Just imagine that here
11/28/2007 11:40 PM (UTC)
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who's bombs are they?
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NOOBSAIBOT9
11/29/2007 12:17 AM (UTC)
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sektor's bombs.
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Sub-Frost055
11/29/2007 01:51 AM (UTC)
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wait, wait, wait... you're not making any sense here whatsoever...

why are you now saying that sekor is in here, when he was never mentioned in the story at all?

this is just a horrible excuse for a story... and this is not baraka's purpose... read his bios from every game he's been in and there's his purpose...
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NOOBSAIBOT9
11/29/2007 01:52 AM (UTC)
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just somebody please lock this!
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Cyber_EV1L
11/29/2007 01:54 AM (UTC)
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Stop making all this pointless bullshit,it pisses some people off you know...?
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scorpionlegendx
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The Glasgow Rangers Football Shirt will never shrink to fit inferior players.

May Scorpion Live on.

check out my armageddon video i made:

www.youtube.com/sektorx2007 you will love it i swear, it captures the essence of battle.

11/29/2007 02:55 AM (UTC)
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i appreciate what your trying to do n00b i really do but some peole just dont like it, it doesnt piss me off if i dont wanna read it i take 2 seconds to click a damn mouse a coule of times and im gone, not a problem.
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Darkhound74
12/02/2007 11:12 PM (UTC)
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Im not gonne be one of those people who bitch and moan tell some their shit just because they wrote a bad story. All you need to do is basically tell why things are happening in the story and dont leave out any details
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KillerInstinct3
12/03/2007 08:14 PM (UTC)
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where is sektor when the blades of purpose go off? why does john candy look so good in National Lampoon's Vacation? Who is your daddy and what does he do? See, these are the answers of life's purpose. You rock little guy, nice captivating story.
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undertaker15-0
12/20/2007 04:41 PM (UTC)
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wha oh i fell a sleep reading this story umm barakas perpose is to kill scorpion right? confused
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