A child was born from a bustling city in Japan. The child's father was well known and ran a hi-tech robotics industry. The father's works revolutionized the robotics industry, which included combining the human mind to that of a machine. But due to this, other people grew jealous. Their jealousy rose to a height where they hired a clan of ninjas to assassinate him and destroy his works. They succeeded.
Before the ninjas left, the boy saw that they were dressed in yellow. Growing up he always held a grudge against that clan of ninja. Researching the ninjas he found out that they were the Shirai Ryu. Learning more by asking locals, he heard rumors about them being a rival of another clan of assassins in China called the Lin Kuei. Eager to exact revenge, he went. He brought his fathers documents which were kept safe as a gift. On his way he met an African-American who knew the location. They became best friends.
Inside the Lin Kuei headquarters they accepted the two as members. Though the Lin Kuei preferred to keep to tradition, the Japanese's documents help advance the Lin Kuei's abilities. The Japanese and the African-American trained with Smoke, who had the power to transform into smoke, and Sub-zero, the cryomancer. After years of training, he was eager to kill every last Shirai Ryu. But he was too late. A sorcerer already killed all of them as a bargain for a task Sub-zero's older brother did.
Years of held in anger drove him insane. It took five men to restrain him with him killing two. Regaining sanity in a meditation room, he thought of something. He proposed to the Grandmaster automating their best men to become the ultimate warrior. Though the Grandmaster was skeptical, his father's documents showed what he could do. The Grandmaster accepted and the Japanese wanted to become the first subject. He is now known to the world as LK-9T9 or Sektor.
Creation date: 2009-5-3-15-25
Modification date: 2009-6-28-17-34
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Sektor's backstory fan-fic
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Content | 339 words | Category | Other | User Views | |
User Likes | User Ratings | 6 | Score | 3.5 |
Kung Lao/Smoke main. Maker of puns and bad jokes.
5/5
Japanese robotics guy gets assassinated by Shirai Ryu and nearly all his works are destroyed. Son vows revenge. Son goes to China to become Lin Kuei. Quan Chi killed the Shirai Ryu in Mythologies so Guy needs to find a cause. He remebers that not everything was destroyed. He gives the Lin Kuei grandmaster the idea of automation and willingly becomes the first Cyborg
3/5
-GTB
not alot would read the whole thing so here's a summary:
Japanese robotics guy gets assassinated by Shirai Ryu and nearly all his works are destroyed. Son vows revenge. Son goes to China to become Lin Kuei. Quan Chi killed the Shirai Ryu in Mythologies so Guy needs to find a cause. He remebers that not everything was destroyed. He gives the Lin Kuei grandmaster the idea of automation and willingly becomes the first Cyborg
its actually not that long so i actually read it. unlike other writen submisions which are soooo long. not that i dont like to read just that i dont like reading really long things on the computer and would rather have it on paper.
so back on topic its really good nice story good imagination maybe if u could dig a little bit more deeper and go into details but overall its great. i actually might write me one of these. 3.9/5 good job man
Kung Lao/Smoke main. Maker of puns and bad jokes.
not alot would read the whole thing so here's a summary:
Japanese robotics guy gets assassinated by Shirai Ryu and nearly all his works are destroyed. Son vows revenge. Son goes to China to become Lin Kuei. Quan Chi killed the Shirai Ryu in Mythologies so Guy needs to find a cause. He remebers that not everything was destroyed. He gives the Lin Kuei grandmaster the idea of automation and willingly becomes the first Cyborg
I really don't know who would open up a written fan submission without expecting a long amount of writing, or not feel like going through it all...but i like the summary as well.
you should stretch out your pacing more, add more details. overall, it's an intresting concept, I just feel it could be fleshed out alot better.
3/5
-GTB
Got to agree with this one. The story seems to be more of an outline; it's missing a lot of meat and should be expanded.