wow, thats really cool, i like the style and the look, and fan is cool, i like this, four and a half dragons

well it looks ok, but she looks way to stiff in the pic, her costume looks like it had a litle to much starch as well her shouleras are also really boney, and her hammys are relitivly skinny compared to her upper leg. I like the quote the best though lol, and the shading is pretty nice as well.
2.5/5

Wow, that's very cool!!!

I think this is a pretty good drawing but it needs a bit of work...I don't exactly know how to explain it...

Anyway, I'm giving this one 4.5 out of 5.

A good first attempt. I don't know if this is your first, but even in post modern style it has some drawbacks.

The knees are the first things that jumped out at me. If you could perhaps drop the heavy line and put in a shadow, it would look better. As it stands it looks like she has fat knees.

Her shoulders are a little two rigid, especially her right shoulder. Whilst the other is more rounded and bigger.

I wonder where you dug up that background. Because it really kinda fits with the story that you added. And I did enjoy the story even though it over used the elipses.

I'm afraid at her feet you cut the pic from the orginial a bit too close.

I do like the new wrap for her body. Though her chainmail bitmap is a bit off. It almost looks like she might have been naked at one point and you added dress on top of her. Anybody who has used Kiss would know what I mean.

The fan looks excellent, but her thumbnail is a bit too long. I love the idea of keeping them at her boots for easy reach in fighting. Ingenious idea there.

All in all 2.5

-Shoe

This isn't my first time here. I still need alot of improve, as you can see. Also, I need to get use to the program I'm using to color it. The background is something I made with a 3D program called Truespace.

Thanks for taking a interest to the story.

It's nice but her shoulders look to skinny and her biceps are to big, they just doesn't match, her torso/chest is facing one way and from her belly down is facing another direction. But it's a cool drawing.
3/5 Dragon Points.

Peace.

Hmmm... It's okay. Not that I could do any better but it looks as if her legs are too long or maybe it's the abdomen that's a bit squished. Her costume and herself are a bit squarry as well. Ant though the background is squarry, it looks kinda cool. did you make it?